The story of Gagagigo

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Okay i took a couple stuff from yugioh wiki but most of the story is mine im adding more soon.

 

The over view:

His story started out in his younger days, serving Eria the Water Charmer as her familiar. During this time, he fought alongside her and many others. He grew up into Gagagigo, and continued to serve Eria for a long time before leaving her. He went on to follow his own path of evil where he ran into Freed the Brave Wanderer. They both started to fight and somehow Gagagigo got dragged into the other dimension through via the Dimensional Prison. Bent on revenge, he managed to get back and arrived on what it seems to be a cemetery. He joined Invader of Darkness and his group of demons only to be betrayed later on by Invader of Darkness himself. He ended up fighting in a cell battle, along with Marauding Captain and Blazing Inpachi. Thanks to Marauding Captain, he was saved by a blast launched by Blazing Inpachi and he turned to the good side to help his newfound friend. He would then join Marauding Captain in a war against Invader of Darkness, and protect one of Marauding Captain's men from Invader of Darkness. However, after that blast, Gagagigo was severely injured and was in need of immediate support. He went on to gain aid from Kozaky, who was a spy among the warriors, and got his body reconstructed, turning him into Giga Gagagigo. This was a mistake and Giga Gagagigo was turned against his friends by Kozaky's Dark World technology. Giga Gagagigo was sent back to his dimension thanks to a machine, which opened the Monster Gate and he became a fighting machine and sought more power. He even attacked Freed the Brave Wanderer. Due to his cybernetic implants, he became power-hungry and transformed into Gogiga Gagagigo.After he transformed he found the stone of transformation and transformed himself into his old self.He met up with freed and freed took him to his kings castle.When free inturduced him to Gagagigo, Gagagigo transformed back to his Gogiga Gagagigo self.He killed the king and took all his servents priseners.After that pure on revenge he called the Invader of Darkness to his court of servents that had aggreed with the overruling.Once the Invader of Darkness came Gagagigo order his knights take them priseners The invader of darkness wwas strong and slayed half of Gagagigos knights but Gagagigo was bored of just watching and jumped over to the Invader of Darkness and dacapitaded him.He ruled his land for many dark years and expanded his rule all over the world in an age called, The giga dark age.But on one night he had word that Freed the Brave Wanderer had escaped from his prison.Gagagigo was furios and set out on an expadetion were he meet up with Eria. Eria was shocked to see Gagagiga when she approched him he attacked her and ordered his servents that he had ordered to follow him yto take her to the castle.After a year of tracking Gagagigo found Freed the Brave Wanderer sleeping in a cave. Gagagigo snuck up on him and captured Freed the Brave Wanderer.He brought him to his castle and ordered that Freed the Brave Wanderer and Eria were to be killed by cutting there heads off.A week later the slaying was to start.Gagagigo sat at his throne while the two priseners were brought.While the knight that was supposed to cut off there heads raised his axe Eria yelled “WAIT!”But the knight didn’t stop nad swung his axe…

[-Griffin]

Some parts of this are just copy/paste from the Trivia page on Gagagigo. There isn't a lot of description and overall this thread feels more like an outline for a plot than a story itself. I'd suggest saving this to a notepad somewhere and starting from the beginning. Make longer, more descriptive chapters of each part of the story.

For example, the first chapter would be around:

"His story started out in his younger days, serving Eria the Water Charmer as her familiar. During this time, he fought alongside her and many others."

Turn things like that into a long, descriptive chapter with specific events happening. If you could extend that line into even half of the brief overview of his entire life that you have, it could make a more respectable read than something as distant and vague as the events in here.

Also - paragraphs.

I'm just trying to help, don't take this as harsh/offensive.

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i know what i like to do is do a overveiw first to then describe things more

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But you're NOT supposed to do an overview, you post the first chapter or the prologue!! Be an expert writer and don't do dope! It's a joke.

[Jinzo]

Coolio