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Dawn of Hell [PG-16 at most] Chapter 5 is now up.


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Eh, slight writers block, but I'm hanging. I can't have all the chapters be filler chapters, cause, I need some sort of action or other thing that relates to the story. I know that there will be a part where Rokujo meets Satan in person. But not soon. It will take ages before that will happen.

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I have read the first two chapters and.... LOVED IT its great some parts (especially the parts with Chrome) make me laugh a bit. It lacks punctuation in some bits but it has a mysterious edge with the pentagram that I love although to improve pic up a few books and see how they describe the things in the room and how they author and direct how the characters move; other then that nothing I think I will subscribe.

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Sure obviously I cant do all of them but I will show you a few (if there are a few) I spot when I skim over it.

could only see one

EDIT:

“What, are you following me?”

or if you ment it to be what are you following me as one

“What are you 'following me?”

to give it a gap and flow

I'm in the top set for everything 8-)

I feel like such a geek xD

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Everyone, due to parental annoyance, I may have to wait till Friday or a certain day where I am somewhere from home to these things. But I can guarantee that since the Chapter is on my computer, I will complete it before Friday, but it will be posted Friday.

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On a side note, I do very well think that I have become a successful member, but since I have more responsibilities upon increase of Grade Level in High School, I may spend less time on here, but I will do my best to keep you all entertained with the following Fan Fic of my own imagination.

Thank you,

Leviathan.

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