Shadow Mir Posted July 26, 2009 Report Share Posted July 26, 2009 [spoiler=Chapter 1: The Scout, Part 1]The Spy was in the base. Everyone continued screaming that at the top of their lungs as I barreled through hordes of sentries and dispensers. I didn't mind he was here. As a matter of fact, I was glad. He killed 4 people when he breached our defenses, and I felt a rush of tensiion flow through me. I ran. Fast. My Force-A-Nature was cocked, ready to kill that backstabbing slimebag in a single shot. I was scared, admittedly. He had killed a Heavy, Medic, and Two other Scouts. Engies kept firing their guns, Pyros spewing flame all over the place; it was madness. It was evident this Spy was getting info from one of us. He couldn't know exactly where the snipers were, nor could he see the Ubercharged heavy coming towards him. This somehow remained a mystery to all of BLU team. I wasn't able to comprehend this man's intentions more than kill and take the intel. Chapter 1, Part 2 Coming Soon Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kendo Fish Posted July 27, 2009 Report Share Posted July 27, 2009 For a first chapter and not a prologue, this is really not descriptive. There's an un-described base, un-described people, un-described you, un-described Force-A-Nature, oddly-capitalized Two. Once you have added some description to this bad boy, I'll take a second look and see whether the story's as interesting as I think it'll be. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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