Sea Serpent Monster;Anyone wants to see?

[Balvarine]

Hello.

I made this card quickly ,for fun.

I'm also interested for rating this card.

So,please rate it,so I can go peacefully to my bed already?

btw,I like posting some just made examples of my cards before I go to sleep.

(Weird,but true!!)

 

 

 

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[Professor Cobra]

Hard to understand. Good pic. I see it as overpowered, I think. 6/10

[flyingdagger8]

Yeah. I think that this card is overpowered and it is hard to understand the effect, but nice pic and very original name for the card.

[Balvarine]

Here,I changed a card.Now it is lot better.

Thank you for your opinion.I understood what were you trying to say me.

[Razieus]

"This card cannot be Normal Summoned". I don't think you need to put "(Instead it can be set.)" Also, I belive that it's "Tribute Summoned", not "Normal Summoned". As for the card itself, I think it's UNDERPOWERED...one tribute for 2100 ATK is fine, but it's effects-it cannot be Normal Summoned or Special Summoned from the Graveyard, it gets 500 ATK when it's returned from the field to your hand(there are many cards that bounce to the hand, but killing cards outright is more often used. Some cards-cards like "Phoenix Wing Wind Blast" send it to the top of the DECK, but that's different as it cuts off their next draw and if you can PWWB something that they can't Summon again, it's devastating) and if it's killed when it's face-down, skip your next Draw Phase. I like the idea, but the fact that you can't draw if it's killed while it's Set, it HAS to be Set and most people would rather outright kill than bounce makes it less playable. Still, I like the name, the picture and the fact that it's not overpowered. Here's what I think a better effect would be:

 

This card cannot be Tribute Summoned or Normal Summoned except by its own effect. This card cannot be Special Summoned from the Graveyard. When this face-down Defense Position monster is attacked, you may discard two cards from your hand to the Graveyard. If you do, until the End Phase of this turn,if this card would be destroyed as a result of battle, it isn't. Then, at the end of the Battle Phase, return this card from the field to your hand. When this card is returned from the field to your hand, Special Summon it in face-up Attack Position and increase its ATK by 500 points. If this face-down card is destroyed as a result of battle, you may discard two cards to return this card from your Graveyard to your hand during your next Standby Phase.

 

I like the card. Nice card-the OCG and grammar could be better, but it's not like the OCG on this card is unbearable. 7.3/10

 

EDIT: I just realized you edited your card after I posted. Better, but I think you should get rid of the "skip your next Draw Phase" effect

[Balvarine]

"This card cannot be Normal Summoned". I don't think you need to put "(Instead it can be set.)" Also' date=' I belive that it's "Tribute Summoned", not "Normal Summoned". As for the card itself, I think it's UNDERPOWERED...one tribute for 2100 ATK is fine, but it's effects-it cannot be Normal Summoned or Special Summoned from the Graveyard, it gets 500 ATK when it's returned from the field to your hand(not many cards do this-cards like "Phoenix Wing Wind Blast" send it to the top of the DECK, but that's different) and if it's killed when it's face-down, skip your next Draw Phase. I like the idea, but the fact that you can't draw if it's killed while it's Set, it HAS to be Set and most people would rather outright kill than bounce makes it less playable. Still, I like the name, the picture and the fact that it's not overpowered. Here's what I think a better effect would be:

 

[i']This card cannot be Tribute Summoned or Special Summoned from the Graveyard. When this face-down Defense Position monster is attacked, you may discard two cards from your hand to the Graveyard. If you do, until the End Phase of this turn,if this card would be destroyed as a result of battle, it isn't. Then, at the end of the Battle Phase, return this card from the field to your hand. When this card is returned from the field to your hand, Special Summon it in face-up Attack Position and increase its ATK by 500 points. If this face-down card is destroyed as a result of battle, you may discard two cards to return this card from your Graveyard to your hand during your next Standby Phase.[/i]

 

I like the card. Nice card-the OCG and grammar could be better, but it's not like the OCG on this card is unbearable. 7.3/10

Thank you for your always great opinion.

See this card now and express yourself!

[Balvarine]

Sorry for double posting,but card now functions better(I think).

[Boss Z]

not increse orignal attack by 500, should ne this card original attack becomes 2600...

 

also it isn't being normal summoned by it's effect that is a special summon

[Razieus]

XD I STILL think you gotta get rid of the Draw Phase effect-it doesn't balance it, it just makes it bad. I still think it's a bit overpowered, so let's revise the effect again:

 

This card cannot be Normal Summoned. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by its own effect. If this card would be destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, you may discard two cards from your hand to the Graveyard. If you do, return this card to your hand and inflict Direct Damage to your Life points equal to half of the ATK of the monster that attacked this card. Then, during the End Phase of the turn this card's effect is activated, Special Summon this card to the field in face-up ATK Position and increase its original ATK by 300 points. Any ATK points this card gains remain in effect until the end of the Duel even if this card is removed from the field. If this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, send the top three cards of of your Deck to the Graveyard.

 

I think that effect is a bit more balanced. And Boss Z is right; it is a Special Summon since at the beginning of the turn is the Standby Phase and monsters cannot be Normal Summoned during that Phase, only Special Summoned. Technically it COULD be considered a Normal Summon if the effect was reworded to say "During your next Main Phase..."-it's just he couldn't Normal Summon or Set any other monster that turn. "Swift Gaia The Fierce Knight" is Normal Summoned if it's the only card in your hand without Tributes.

 

The newest card that I see as I post this gets a 7.6/10. It's still a bit overpowered, but you're improving. I like my suggestion, though =P I'd like to see some more cards, too.