Chaos Impact™ Posted July 5, 2009 Report Share Posted July 5, 2009 Hello and welcome to the new world of Yugioh!E.R will (I hope) become one of the most popular fan fics on this forum.I will always accept your critisim and try and take it on board to improve your view in future episodes. I will not accept Swearing, Discusions between memebers (Except myself) and any other disrespectful antics like that.Well now we've got that out of the way lets get to the characters![spoiler= [b]Characters[/b] "Click To View"][spoiler= [b]Protagonists[/b] "Click To View"] Name: Taylor WatchmanAge: 17Deck: Sea-Serpent SynchroTrump Card: Torrent Beast Of The OceanBio: Older Brother of Ashely, he is very protective and sometimes forgets that she's and teenager. His Powerful Sea-Serpent Deck is well known around his area, nobody has beaten him since the fifth grade. He never duels to gain he only ever duels if he thinks he can change the situation. Name: Ashley WatchmanAge: 13Deck: Flaming Seduction SynchroTrump Card: Sorceror Of Pure FireBio: Younger sister of Taylor, she is a rebel at heart but is usally redirected down the right path by here brother. She gets into trouble by taking on people better than her and relies on her big brother to get her out of trouble. Her deck is very powerful but works even better if she's in a tag duel with her brother. [spoiler=[b]Villians[/b] "Click To View]Name: PsychconAge: ???Deck: Psychic SynchroTrump Card: Thought Ruler ArchfiendBio: Not much is known about him, but all we know is that he is the leader of the evil organsiation. 'The Rogues'. [spoiler= [b]Episode Guide[/b] "Click to View"]Episode 1 - 05-07-09 [spoiler=[b]Additional Info[/b] "Click To View"]- After each episode i will post a card/s that are made up that have been used in the episode. Enjoy and remember to keep a look out for new episodes!Episode 1- Opposites Attract Pt. 1 We enter the scene seeing a girl with blond hair shouting at two older boys holding a red bag high above thier heads. While she jumps to grab it, Ashley: Hey, give that back! Thats got my deck in it! Boy 1: Oh, so it's got your deck in it, has it? Well lets take a look at it shall we. One of the boys stuck his hand inside the bag and rumaged around until he eventually pulls out a set of Duel Monsters cards, he flicks through the deck until he sees a card that reflects the harsh sun onto his face to make it a warm shade of yellow. The second boy leans over the first boys shoulder, shocked at what he sees and says, Boy 2: Whoa, looks like we hit the jackpot with a card like that! Ashley: Get your filthy hands off my best card! The two boys look at the girl, then quickly turn around and run in the opposite direction holding the card high above thier heads while they run through a puddle the water seems to rise out of the puddle, like a snake that raps around the boys ankles making them trip and fall. This sent the bag up in the air and landing on the curb beside them. Ashley: Hahahah! She quickly composes herself and runs over to the bag and picks it up, immediately pulling out the cards and quickly checking through them scanning them like a machine. Boys 1 & 2: Ouch! Boy 1: What just happened? Boy 2: I dunno i think we both slipped on this puddle. Boy 1: We BOTH slipped on a puddle?! that wasn't just a coinsidence it felt like it grabbed my leg Boy 2: (Joking) Maybe it was witch craft! Boy 1: Shut your mouth, we need to get back that card! They both get up, and stand behing Ashley looming over her, casting large shadows. Boy 1: We challenge you to a duel, if we win you give us that rare card, and if you win we'll leave right now and never bother you again. Ashley: But hang on, thats not fair there is two of you and only one of me........ Boy 2: (whispering) exactly our point.. ???: Well done Ash, no it isn't fair is it? What have i told you about getting into trouble with older duelists. Ashley: Taylor! I can fight my own battles you know. Just becuase your my older brother doesn't mean you have to help me EVERY time i get into trouble. Boy 1: Wait........did you say Taylor? Do you mean Taylor Watchmans is your brother? Ashley: Yes, unfortunatly. A much older boy than the bullies emerges out from a corner. He smiles flicking his blond hair out from his face. He walks over to the bullies and stands over them, head and shoulders above them. Taylor: What have you been doing to my little sister? I hope it's not bad becuase if it was..... i will crush you. Boy 2: err... no we were just playing a little game...... wern't we. He nudges the other boy who nods very quickly but doesn't say a word. Taylor: Well it didn't sound like a fun game, and if i'm not mistaken i heard you where challenging my sister to a duel. Two on one isn't that fun, so i'll join a as i heard if you win my sister has to give you her best card so i'll do that too. Trust me our cards work best together so it will way worth your while to duel us. Boy 1: O.K, if you so insistant we'll duel you both. Get ready... DuelTaylor / Ashley - 8000Boy 1 / Boy 2 - 8000 Boy 1: I'll start and activate the field spell, Venom Swamp! The ground changes and a area of sludge and swamp plants burst from a hole in the ground. Boy 1: And now i set a monster in defence positon and i end my turn. Ashley: Good start but i can do better! I summon Blazing Inapchi! A giant flaming wooden giant flies out of the card and stands on the field. The heat from his body made Taylor sweat, yet he still seems uneffected with his cool persona. Ashley: Now i attack you face down monster, go Inpachi attack his monster! The flaming giant charged at the face down card throwing a flaming punch at the card, until it flips to reveal a large cobra curled on the ground. The attack deflects off the cobra and the inpachi returns to Ashley's field. Boy 1: My Venom Cobra has 2000 defence so it can easily deflect your attack!Taylor / Ashely - 7850Boy 1 / Boy 2 - 8000 Taylor: You shouldn't rush into battles like that. Thanks to that we lost some life points. Ashely: Shut it! Are you afriad you'll lose your first duel since the fith grade? and it's not that bad so i'll set two cards and end my turn. Boy 2: You may think it o.k at the moment but after i tribute our cobra to summon my venom boa! The cobra is sucked into the swap and in exchange a giant boa rises from the swamp and slithers along the ground it's tounge flicking viloently. Boy 2: Now i'll attack your inpachi! Ashley: But your boa only has 1800 ATK and my inpachi has 1850 so your monster will be destroyed Boy 2: But you forget the effect of my swamp it lowers your monsters ATK points by 500 every turn, so your monster only has 1350! The boa bites the inpachi destroying it in a instant. [align=center]Taylor / Ashley - 7400Boy 1 / Boy 2 - 8000[/align] Taylor: See what did i just tell you? you left yourslef wide open to an attack and didn't pay attention to his field spells effect. Ashley: Look i don't want to lectured on battling by you. O.K? Also why didn't you tell me about the effect o great dueling master? Taylor: I though you should know these things by now, haven't you ever watched any of my duels? Ashley: Well obviously no! I usually get knocked out in local tornements before i get to see you duel! Boy 2: Err sorry to interrupt your little family argument, i'll set a card and end my turn. But don't forget our venom swamp makes your blazing impatchi's ATK go down by 500 points! Taylor: Well you two seem to think your deck is very strong but mine's better. I summon my Gemini Lancer and now i activate the spell double summon and it lets me normal summon 1 other monster to the field this turn and i choose water spirit and i think you know whats coming...... Boy 1: No you can't summon that, not on your first turn... Taylor: I tune my water spirit to my gemini lancer to synchro summon my Cybertorrent Frog!! The two water monsters merge together forming a giant armoured frog. Taylor: This little frog here is very special becuase actually he is emmune to you field spell infact he's emmune to all field spell effects. Boy 1: But our field spell is the source for all our monsters!! Taylor: Well in that case your screwed... To Be Continued.....Find out what if Taylor's Frog can defeat destroy the bullies field spell, and see if Taylor and Ashley defeat the two bullies and manage to keep their best cards.Find Out In The Next Action Packed Episode Of [YGO] Elemental Reserection!Find Out In The Next Action Packed Episode Of [YGO]Here is the post for all the fake cards so this will be updated alot!! CybertorrentWaterAqua/Synchro/Effect5*Lore:1 WATER type tuner monster + 1 or more non tuner monstersThis card is uneffected by field spell effectsATK: 1500DEF: 2000 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Supreme Gamesmaster Posted July 5, 2009 Report Share Posted July 5, 2009 TITLE: It's spelled "Resurrection." Not promising.Hello and welcome to the new world of Yugioh!E.R will (I hope) become one of the most popular fan fics on this forum.I will always accept your critisim and try and take it on board to improve your view in future episodes. I will not accept Swearing' date=' Discusions between memebers (Except myself) and any other disrespectful antics like that.Well now we've got that out of the way lets get to the characters![spoiler= [b']Characters[/b] "Click To View"][spoiler= [b]Protagonists[/b] "Click To View"] Name: Taylor WatchmanAge: 17Deck: Sea-Serpent SynchroTrump Card: Torrent Beast Of The OceanBio: Older Brother of Ashely, he is very protective and sometimes forgets that she's and teenager. His Powerful Sea-Serpent Deck is well known around his area, nobody has beaten him since the fifth grade. He never duels to gain he only ever duels if he thinks he can change the situation. Name: Ashley WatchmanAge: 13Deck: Flaming Seduction SynchroTrump Card: Sorceror Of Pure FireBio: Younger sister of Taylor, she is a rebel at heart but is usally redirected down the right path by here brother. She gets into trouble by taking on people better than her and relies on her big brother to get her out of trouble. Her deck is very powerful but works even better if she's in a tag duel with her brother. [spoiler=[b]Villians[/b] "Click To View]Name: PsychconAge: ???Deck: Psychic SynchroTrump Card: Thought Ruler ArchfiendBio: Not much is known about him, but all we know is that he is the leader of the evil organsiation. 'The Rogues'.You know, you really shouldn't give out information for a character that doesn't exist yet. [spoiler= [b]Episode Guide[/b] "Click to View"]Episode 1 - 05-07-09 [spoiler=[b]Additional Info[/b] "Click To View"]- After each episode i will post a card/s that are made up that have been used in the episode. Enjoy and remember to keep a look out for new episodes!Episode 1- Opposites Attract Pt. 1 We enter the scene seeing a girl with blond hair shouting at two older boys holding a red bag high above thier heads. Okay, that's great. Where's the scene, then? What time period? What are the surroundings? ...no answer. Great. By the way, that sentence is horrendous to read. While she jumps to grab it, Ashley: Hey, give that back! Thats got my deck in it! Oh, joy. Script speak. Please remember this little maxim: script speak is for n00bs. Novel format is the only way you'll ever get anything done. Also, why in the world is the Deck the most treasured possession in there? From the start, it would seem like good allocation of resources, but she's obviously desperate. Are the Duels realistic enough that it'll matter? If it's just a game, we might have a problem. Boy 1: Oh, so it's got your deck in it, has it? Well lets take a look at it shall we. You seem determined not to use apostrophes in your contractions. You have one out of three thus far. One of the boys stuck his hand inside the bag and rumaged around until he eventually pulls out a set of Duel Monsters cards, he flicks through the deck until he sees a card that reflects the harsh sun onto his face to make it a warm shade of yellow. Run-on sentence per comma splice here. The second boy leans over the first boys shoulder, shocked at what he sees and says, Boy 2: Whoa, looks like we hit the jackpot with a card like that! What. The. Hell. Before, it seemed like the bullies were taunting her for playing DM at all; now, it seems as if they value the game as well. Could you please try and explain the significance of Duel Monsters — is it a popular sport, a method of social status, or real monsters summoned to do the wielders' bidding? Ashley: Get your filthy hands off my best card! Whoa, a best card in only one copy. Probably something cool like Dark Armed Dragon. The two boys look at the girl, then quickly turn around and run in the opposite direction holding the card high above thier heads while they run through a puddle the water seems to rise out of the puddle, like a snake that raps around the boys ankles making them trip and fall. This sent the bag up in the air and landing on the curb beside them. Ashley: Hahahah! She quickly composes herself and runs over to the bag and picks it up, immediately pulling out the cards and quickly checking through them scanning them like a machine. That's an awesome simile, but you need more punctuation. Boys 1 & 2: Ouch! Boy 1: What just happened? Boy 2: I dunno i think we both slipped on this puddle. Boy 1: We BOTH slipped on a puddle?! that wasn't just a coinsidence it felt like it grabbed my leg Boy 2: (Joking) Maybe it was witch craft! Boy 1: Shut your mouth, we need to get back that card! They both get up, and stand behing Ashley looming over her, casting large shadows. Boy 1: We challenge you to a duel, if we win you give us that rare card, and if you win we'll leave right now and never bother you again. Ashley: But hang on, thats not fair there is two of you and only one of me........ That doesn't make much sense. No sane Duelist would go around with only one Deck no matter the world, and if Ashley went twice with different Decks, that'd be perfectly fair. Boy 2: (whispering) exactly our point.. ???: Well done Ash, no it isn't fair is it? What have i told you about getting into trouble with older duelists. Ashley: Taylor! I can fight my own battles you know. Just becuase your my older brother doesn't mean you have to help me EVERY time i get into trouble. Boy 1: Wait........did you say Taylor? Do you mean Taylor Watchmans is your brother? Ashley: Yes, unfortunatly. A much older boy than the bullies emerges out from a corner. He smiles flicking his blond hair out from his face. He walks over to the bullies and stands over them, head and shoulders above them. Taylor: What have you been doing to my little sister? I hope it's not bad becuase if it was..... i will crush you. Boy 2: err... no we were just playing a little game...... wern't we. He nudges the other boy who nods very quickly but doesn't say a word. Taylor: Well it didn't sound like a fun game, and if i'm not mistaken i heard you where challenging my sister to a duel. Two on one isn't that fun, so i'll join a as i heard if you win my sister has to give you her best card so i'll do that too. Trust me our cards work best together so it will way worth your while to duel us. Nice characterization — Taylor is an arrogant fool who apparently has some skill. Boy 1: O.K, if you so insistant we'll duel you both. Get ready... No matter how this is read, you screwed this up. There's no predicate in that first clause. DuelTaylor / Ashley - 8000Boy 1 / Boy 2 - 8000 Boy 1: I'll start and activate the field spell, Venom Swamp! The ground changes and a area of sludge and swamp plants burst from a hole in the ground. Boy 1: And now i set a monster in defence positon and i end my turn. Ashley: Good start but i can do better! I summon Blazing Inapchi! ...what. That's not better; it's a VANILLA. A giant flaming wooden giant flies out of the card and stands on the field. The heat from his body made Taylor sweat, yet he still seems uneffected with his cool persona. Psychological jargon FTW, but "personality" fits better here. Ashley: Now i attack you face down monster, go Inpachi attack his monster! The flaming giant charged at the face down card throwing a flaming punch at the card, until it flips to reveal a large cobra curled on the ground. The attack deflects off the cobra and the inpachi returns to Ashley's field. Boy 1: My Venom Cobra has 2000 defence so it can easily deflect your attack!Taylor / Ashely - 7850Boy 1 / Boy 2 - 8000 Taylor: You shouldn't rush into battles like that. Thanks to that we lost some life points. Ashely: Shut it! Are you afriad you'll lose your first duel since the fith grade? and it's not that bad so i'll set two cards and end my turn. Boy 2: You may think it o.k at the moment but after i tribute our cobra to summon my venom boa! Oh, dear gods. Venom monsters are probably the worst archetype ever released. You'll have a hard time building up drama unless the protagonists are using some crappy archetype like Frogs... Oh, wait, the girl plays vanillas. Where are the good Duelists?! The cobra is sucked into the swap and in exchange a giant boa rises from the swamp and slithers along the ground it's tounge flicking viloently. Boy 2: Now i'll attack your inpachi! Ashley: But your boa only has 1800 ATK and my inpachi has 1850 so your monster will be destroyed Boy 2: But you forget the effect of my swamp it lowers your monsters ATK points by 500 every turn, so your monster only has 1350! The boa bites the inpachi destroying it in a instant. [align=center]Taylor / Ashley - 7400Boy 1 / Boy 2 - 8000[/align] Taylor: See what did i just tell you? you left yourslef wide open to an attack and didn't pay attention to his field spells effect. Ashley: Look i don't want to lectured on battling by you. O.K? Also why didn't you tell me about the effect o great dueling master? Taylor: I though you should know these things by now, haven't you ever watched any of my duels? Ashley: Well obviously no! I usually get knocked out in local tornements before i get to see you duel! That explains a lot. Boy 2: Err sorry to interrupt your little family argument, i'll set a card and end my turn. But don't forget our venom swamp makes your blazing impatchi's ATK go down by 500 points! Taylor: Well you two seem to think your deck is very strong but mine's better. I summon my Gemini Lancer and now i activate the spell double summon and it lets me normal summon 1 other monster to the field this turn and i choose water spirit and i think you know whats coming...... Boy 1: No you can't summon that, not on your first turn... Taylor: I tune my water spirit to my gemini lancer to synchro summon my Cybertorrent Frog!! The two water monsters merge together forming a giant armoured frog. Well, whaddaya know. The protagonists really are running Frogs. Way to keep their credibility up. That claim about his not losing a Duel since fifth grade would be a lot more credible if he were a) not stupid enough to use Frogs, or maybe b) in sixth grade. Taylor: This little frog here is very special becuase actually he is emmune to you field spell infact he's emmune to all field spell effects. It's spelled "immune." Spellcheck exists. Boy 1: But our field spell is the source for all our monsters!! Taylor: Well in that case your screwed... To Be Continued.....Find out what if Taylor's Frog can defeat destroy the bullies field spell, and see if Taylor and Ashley defeat the two bullies and manage to keep their best cards. If they don't, they fail YGO forever.Find Out In The Next Action Packed Episode Of [YGO] Elemental Reserection!Find Out In The Next Action Packed Episode Of [YGO]Here is the post for all the fake cards so this will be updated alot!! CybertorrentWaterAqua/Synchro/Effect5*Lore:1 WATER type tuner monster + 1 or more non tuner monstersThis card is uneffected by field spell effectsATK: 1500DEF: 2000I think what you're looking for is, "Negate the effects of all Field Spell cards on the field." Also, why is he using this piece o' crap, rather than, say, Magical Android? It's not like it'd be hard to use MST/Storm/Trunade/Dust Tornado/Breaker/etc to destroy the Field Spell... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chaos Impact™ Posted July 10, 2009 Author Report Share Posted July 10, 2009 o.k thanks for that i'll just quit now since it's such a crap fan fic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Supreme Gamesmaster Posted July 10, 2009 Report Share Posted July 10, 2009 Congrats for missing the point. If we say it's bad, don't give up — fix it. If we really thought it was bad, would we say how it could improve at all? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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