a rebirth of a good fan fic

[asuma181]

Jaden was living the good life: he just graduated from Duel Academy, confessed his feelings to Alexis(who is now his wife), and just two days ago defeated Yugi Muto to become the next Undisputed Duel Monster Champion (King Of Games). Jaden had it all. He just took over Paradias, the most powerflu multi-trillion dollar industry (the only multi-trillion dollar industry), formely owned by Dratz( who lost yo Yugi ten years ago), and then taken over by Jaden's father. But unkown to Jaden, a new adventure was about to begin. The Kabia's were creating a new tournament; The Allstars Tournament. The world's strongest duelists, young and old, were invited. When Jaden and Alexis received thei invitations, they thrilled to test the ever increasing skill against new duelists, and meet their old friends once again. But Jaden will meet one the strongest, toughest, sick, twisted, demented, saddistic, duelist his destiny has put him up against: Reshef the Destroyer. Reshef the Destroyer has waited a loong time to meet Jaden, so he can defeat and kill him. Reshef will soon reveal his plot to rule the world, and with the Demon Gods on his side, he might just do it. Now on the day of the Allstars Tournament, destiny will unite Jaden and Reshef for their battle that will decide the fate of the world.

 

The day of the Allstars Tournament has come. Jaden and Alexis have trained very hard, pushing themselves to their very limits, and it was going to payoff. The Yukis(Jaden Yuki and Alexis Rhodes Yuki) traveled to the Allstars Stadium in Jaden's private jet. Once there they saw one hundred duelists, some of them old friends waiting for the reunion. Jaden quickly picked out the others. Syrus and Zane Truesdale, Chazz Princeton, Bastion Miswa, Aster Pheniox, Tyranno Hasslebarry, Johan Anderson, Adrian geco, Axle O'brien, Jim Crocodile Cook, Blair Flanniggrams, Atticus Rhodes(now Jaden's brother-in-law), and even Prof. Crowller. All of them except Crowller gathered for their reunion. The others couldn't believe Jaden did the impossible; defeating Yugi Muto to become the new King of Games, and wielding the 3 god cards and the 3 scared beast. The others were even more shocked to find Jaden and Alexis were now officaly married. "Well it about time my sis found the right man to settle down with,"said Atticus. "When are you two going to have kids?" he continued. This suprised everyone except Jaden who replied,"Soon Atticus." Alexis looked at Jaden in awe as he smiled at the notation of being a father to be. Alexis always wondered what kind father Jaden would be, and answer didn't worry her. "We really want twins, a boy and a girl, we'll name the boy after Jaden and name the girl Sophia," Alexis said with her seductive smile. "Jaden Yuki Jr. and Sophia Yuki, that sounds awesome!" Jaden replied bringing Alexis' goddess-like body close to his. Alexis gave him her patent seductive moan when Atticus interuppted. "Come on you two, save that type action for later, we gotta tournament to compete in," said Atticus. "After the tournament,"replied Jaden.

The opening ceromony was awesome to the highest degree. Seto Kabia spoke clearly into microphone. "Welcome elite duelists to the Allstars Tournament. Here we will crown the Allstars Champion, who will receive a cash prize of 10 million dollars, and an rare promo card that Chumley huffington from Industrial Illusions created *raises hand in the air with the card in it* ," he said. "Now on with the tournament rules. All duelists will be randomly chosen by the Kabia Corp mainframe. Who ever appears on the jumbotron will be opponents in next duel of the tournament. Before each duel the mainframe will show the stats of the duelist. Now let the tournament begin!"

[Champster]

Haha, nice...Reshef? :D

Not that i'm saying anything bad.

[asuma181]

"I cant wait to win chumley's card"said jaden then the screen showed

*JADEN YUKIvs.BANDIT KEITH*"huh im facing that punk oh well this wont take long"said keith"hay who you calling punk im the king of game so lets throw down ill go first i summon elemental hero stratos in attack and search my deck for my wildheart now i play double summon and fuse my wildheart and bladeedge to make elemental hero wildededge"said jaden "my turn draw i summon cyber dragon in attack mode and attakc your stratos"said keith lpsKEITH/4000 lpsJADEN/3700"my turn now i play monster reborn and search for my elemental hero ocean and now i play him and attack your cyber dragon with wildedge then the rest attack directly now its your move"

lpsKEITH/200 lps.JADEN/3700"alright draw I set on card in my back feild and end"said keith"thanks now I attack for game"said jaden "I dont think so because I flip my mirror force"said keith "what no way my monsters oh well I will set this monster in defence and its your move"said jaden"ok draw and ill set a spell go"said keith "alright now I flip my magician of faith and bring back my double summon now i will sacrifice my magician of faith to summon my elemental hero necroshade and i will attack for game

lpsKEITH/0000 lpsJADEN/3700"nice match kid here is my launcher spider for winning"said keith glumly"thanks bro got to go see ya"said jaden as he ran to visit his freinds"nice match J i meen maybe even i couldent even do that well"said jesse"ya sam ere"said jim"ditto"said syrus"ya i probly couldent eather nice work sarge"said hassleberry "good goin king of games" said alexis "ha that was pure luck wasnt it it always was all through school even"said chazz "OH JUST SHUT UP CHAZZ"said alexis

 

 

 

 

 

http://i21.tinypic.com/20aug5x.jpg[/img] launche spider/ http://www.pokeorder.com/yug1stedmetr95.html

[Champster]

Could use a little Grammer Help, and Paragraphs would do nicely. Other then that...Nice Duel. But needs to be Longer.

[asuma181]

Could use a little Grammer Help' date=' and Paragraphs would do nicely. Other then that...Nice Duel. But needs to be Longer.

[/quote'] I would but its easier this way

 

 

 

The next names on the screen where SYRUS TRUSDALEvs.ESPA ROBA

"hmmm I see in the stars you are going to lose"said roba"Oh give it up roba i know your not phsicic"said syrus"ill go first i set two cards now go"said roba"fine i summon jetroid and attack and go "said syrus lpsROBA/2800 lpsSYRUS/4000 "fine i play heavy storm and destroy my two statue of the wicked's and sacrifice them to summon ancient geat golem"said roba "my turn i play a face down and turn jetroid to defence then set a face down go"said syrus"I attack"said roba "ha ha take 3000 life point because i flip magic cylinder and thats game"said syrus "i dont think so i play woboku to turn battle damage to zero"said roba "hmp thought that would work oh well i play power bond to make super vehicroid jumbo drill and he attacks your monster and there both destroyed and i attack directly"said syrus lpsROBA/1600 lpsSYRUS/4000"my turn draw i set one monster go"said roba"I summon patroid in attack mode and attack your face down" said syrus"i flip kuriboh"said roba "now i play sheild and sword and attack for game"said syrus lpsROBA/0000lpsSYRUS/4000"you win here is my anciant gear golem for winning"said roba with a smirk as he handed over the card then al syrusus freinds yelled "WAY TO GO SYE"

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

(jetroid) (statue of the wicked)

http://www.pokeorder.com/yucyreje.html http://www.yugioh-cards.net/Merchant2/store/db2-en243.html

(heavy storm) http://www.pokeorder.com/yug1stedmetr141.html (ancient gear golem) http://www.yugioh-cards.net/Merchant2/store/tlm-en006.html (magic cylinder) http://www.yugioh-cards.net/Merchant2/store/sd6-en036.html (super vehicroid jumbo drill) http://images.google.com/imgres?imgurl=http://www.yugioh-cards.net/Merchant2/graphics/00000001/potd/huge/POTD-EN036.jpg&imgrefurl=http://www.yugioh-cards.net/Merchant2/store/potd-en036-1st.html&h=536&w=364&sz=63&hl=en&start=1&um=1&tbnid=OqOhA8EwnSTGtM:&tbnh=132&tbnw=90&prev=/images%3Fq%3Dsuper%2Bvehicroid%2Bjumbo%2Bdrill%26svnum%3D10%26um%3D1%26hl%3Den%26rlz%3D1T4ADBS_en___US221 (power bond) http://images.google.com/imgres?imgurl=http://www.yugioh-cards.net/Merchant2/graphics/00000001/crv/CRV-EN037.jpg&imgrefurl=http://www.yugioh-cards.net/Merchant2/store/crv-en037.html&h=382&w=255&sz=42&hl=en&start=2&um=1&tbnid=bJkUyGhzFWwETM:&tbnh=123&tbnw=82&prev=/images%3Fq%3Dpower%2Bbond%26svnum%3D10%26um%3D1%26hl%3Den%26rlz%3D1T4ADBS_en___US221

(patroid) http://www.pokeorder.com/yucyrepa.html

(shield and sword) http://www.yugiohcards.net/Merchant2/store/db2-en077.html

[asuma181]

BUMP!!!!!!!!!!

next names were JESSE ANDERSON.vs.TRYSTAN TAYLOR

"alright u ready ruby lets duel"said jesse"ill go first i set one card and play two man cell battle and end"said trystan "all right ill summon my CRYSTAL BEAST DIAMOND WOLF in attack mode and play the spell DOUBLE CRYSTAL to summon my saphire pegusus then i use his effect to summon my crystal beast topaz tiger now my pegusus attacks your face down (aww my sagi the dark clown)know my tiger attacks and now my wolf atacks twice thanks to his effect and thats game"said jesse with his thumb down TRYSTAN/0000 JESSE/4000"nice here is my metal morph card"said trystan "thanks here you take this and jesse handed him a red eyes a metal morph and a red eyes metal dragon im going to help you build a dagon deck come here at noon sunday"said jesse"you got it man"said trystan"WAY TO GO JESS"yelled all his freinds

 

people please reply so i can keep going

 

 

 

(two-man cell battle)http://www.trading-cards-now.com/yugioh-trading-cards/SODEN045ST/yugioh/two-man-cell-battle-sod-en045-yu-gi-oh-soul-of-the-duelist-1st-edition/index.html (saphire pegesus)http://www.discountanimetoys.com/fotb-en007.html (topaz tiger)http://www.inmint.com/1fotb-en004.html (sagi the dark clown)http://www.pokeorder.com/yug1stedmetr66.html(red eyes)http://www.pokeorder.com/yugredbdrag.html (metal morph)http://www.bbtoystore.com/Merchant2/yugioh/YU_FMR003.jpg(red eyes black metal dragon)http://www.bbtoystore.com/Merchant2/yugioh/YU_FMR001.jpg

[Champster]

As i said before, it's Short. Maybe add a story to it? like they're talking or something, then it might improve alot better.

[Fh-Fh]

dont like GX. Yugi would Pwn Jaden. Who the frick is Jaden's father and wtf does he do. Alexis would never marry Jaden. Tristan sucks and has little record of dueling. Kaiba would never run a tournament where the prize is an elemental hero. Sorry, but this aint no good.

[Fh-Fh]

dont like GX. Yugi would Pwn Jaden. Who the frick is Jaden's father and wtf does he do. Alexis would never marry Jaden. Tristan sucks and has little record of dueling. Kaiba would never run a tournament where the prize is an elemental hero. Sorry' date=' but this aint no good.

[/quote']

 

I got your neg rep. sorry for the harsh report. I was in a real bad mood (grounded for a week). Maybe you should try a new approach. In the fanfic guidlines it says you shouldnt use characters we know. (cos we know thier decks) My fanfic, reeks (i think) but try a new fanfic. NOTE: im not trying to get a good rep from you, im just apologizing.

[asuma181]

BUMP BUMP BU BUMP BUMP BUMP BUMP

 

the next names were TYRANNO HASSLEBERRYvs.REX RAPTOR

"oh no"said hassleberry "what is it sarge" asked Jaden "im facin rex raptor the dino duelist he's my idol i dont wana face him"said hassleberry"oh dont worry about it sarge your the best dino duelist i know you’ll do fine"said jaden “oh ok I’LL DO IT AND ILL WIN”said hassleberry” I don’t think so twerp lets duel ”said rex “ all right ill start I special summon gilasaourus now I sacrifice him to summon dark driceratops and that’s a turn” said hassleberry “ha you’re a disgrace to dino duelist’s I summon my mirical jurrasic egg in defence mode that’s a turn”said rex “me im a disgrace you’re a disgrace I play Jurassic world now I special summon my second gilosaurus know I sacrifice them both to summon super conducter tyranno how do you like me now rex”said hassleberry “don..don’t th..th..thank th..that sca…sca…scares m…m…me “said rex”looks like your scared rex chiken attack tyranno”(nooooooooo) HASSLEBERRY4000/REX700 “ill win next turn I end”said hassleberry “ I don’t think so I set a monster and end”said rex “I summon my gilasaorus now gilasaurus attack (no) now conducter finish this” said

hassleberry “so rex your supposed to be the best of the best you stink worse than dino poop” said hassleberry

[SebastiaanZ]

If you put some effort into writing things outside the duels and you would lenghten the duels more, this would become even better. After the first post I thought we were going to see a good fanfic, I was a bit disappointed when I read the first few chapters.

[Yusei Fudou]

Typos, kinda bad duels, and card images with some screwed up links and bad dialogs. This is a bad fanfic. 5/10

[Purple Dinosaur]

It's a nice try...It's nice that you're showing more effort from one episode to the other...Some improvement is necessary but I like the story! Look at my sig and you can get a link to my Fan-Fic...You can get some ideas there!! Continue!

[027982]

impressive job.

[Dag 417]

This is so-so, you don't seem to be using some of the card effects right.

[asuma181]

you guys cant say this one sucks its three pages on microsoft word so here you go

 

 

It was Saturday and the tournament was on break so all the friends went out to eat in Jaden’s private jet “so guys who do you want to duel next me im aimin for yugi moto” said jaden “I wana beat weevil underwood”said hassleberry “I ant to just eat more and more so I don’t care who I duel”said aticus *we will be arriving in domino city in about 10 minuets* “awesome im starving” said jaden “hey honey were here” said alexis “awesome” said jaden “hey guys I heard of this great resurant I always wanted to go to” said jesse “cool lets go then” said jaden all the guys (and alexis) walk over to the resturant and see a duel going on

Kid/I set a monster

Boy/I set two face-downs and play my spell heavy storm to destroy my two statue of the wicked’s *slugish looking feinds appear and smirk with a giant tong hanging out of there mouth* and I sac them to summon my elite warrior *a tall warrior appears holding a keyish sword and spikey brown hair with blue eyes* how do you stand up against that Evin I end

 

Evin/what do I say I say this I play soul exchange and sac my face-down along with your elite warrior to summon my FREEZE RAY DRAGON *a giant light blue dragon with darker colored blue hair on his shoulders and down his neck like a horses mane appears and roars a threatening roar* I set two face downs and attack how do you like that john I end

 

John/1550

Evin/4000

 

John/aw I set a monster and play lightning vortex *lightning is going to strike at freeze ray dragon then it stops some how*

 

Evin/I play magic jammer *a force field appears around the dragon as the lightning stops*

 

John/no oh well I play a face down go

 

Evin/draw I summon my double dragon *a blue dragon and a red dragon appear that look identical and then they look at each other and laugh* now my freeze ray dragon will attack *freeze ray dragon emits a giant beam of ice and it destroyes the monster*

 

John/ no not my child warrior *a young child with a sword bigger than him in a yellow shirt with green shoulder pads and yellow shorts appears for a second then explodes*

 

Evin/ now my double dragon will attack twice for game *both the dragons start to charge a beam and the red one charges a blue beam and the blue one charges a red beam to represent there brothers and launch them then the beams stop and back fire and the monster is destroyed* what how did that happen

 

John/like this I play sacuretsu armor *a fiendish armor appears and launches the two beams back on there owners*

 

Evin/ oh well I flip my trap explosive impact *earth appears above johns head and john looks nervous* now in two turns you lose 3/4ths of your life points

 

John/that cant be a good card for me

 

Evin/well you guesed right but oh well I end

 

John/ no I play one face down in my spell and trap and call it a turn *says this with a smirk on his face*

 

Evin/alright that’s one turn draw perfect I play the spell time clock *a clock appears and goes from saying 11:59 to 12:00* now you go down to 516 life points now freeze ray attack for game *freeze ray dragon emits a ice beam and its going strait then it disappears*what how did that not hit you

 

John/ because I played this magic cylinder *then two cylinders appear both pointing at Evin one holding freeze rays blast in it the other holding nothing then the beam makes a u turn right in front of johns face and then it goes into the other cylinder and launches at Evin*

 

John/516

Evin/1550

 

Evin/no way oh well I play a face down and end

 

John/you just spelled defeat for your self I play the field spell playground of the ninja *bamboo poles launches out of the ground and freeze ray dragon fly’s straight up so a pole doesn’t hit him in the face* now I play the spell card Christmas tree *a giant tree appears with gifts under it* now I get one card with “Christmas” in its card name I choose my Christmas warrior *all the gifts exept on explode then the final explodes and a man is setting there that’s looks a lot like santa only more muscular wearing big red baggy pants a red vest and a santa clause hat carrying a bag over his shoulder with long brown hair*and now I summon my candycane soldier *a boy with angel wings appears wearing no shirt yet shoulder pads and baggy white pants with a green stripe and a red sash going around his waist with red and white socks on carrying a candycane with red and white hair a halo and four entenas coming out of his back* now my warrior is 3000 attack now warrior attack and finish this

 

Evin/I don’t think so I play sacuretsu armor * a fiendish armor appears and sends Christmas warrior flying backwards and hit the floor then his present bomb he was holding lands on his chest and explodes along with the warrior*

 

John/no I end

 

Evin/you just won me the duel freeze ray freeze his monster *candycane soldier is incased in ice* now I get a freeze token in defence mode *a small blue flamish looking entity appears on Evin’s side of the field* now I sac my token to summon my THUNDER HORN DRAGON *a giant blue dragon with hands on the end of its wings and a yellow boneish horn appears on Evin’s side of the field* now I use his effect and discard a card from my hand to destroy all your face up monsters *thunder horn dragon roars and lightning hits his horn and then his horn emits sparks then he aims his horn at the frozen candycane warrior and realeses the lightning and the monster shatters* now freeze ray finish this *freeze ray dragon launches his usual beam of ice at john it hits john and johns life points drop to zero*

 

John/0000

Evin/1550

 

Jaden/ woh jesse do you se that to look at that kid Evin he has a duel spirit it looks like that freeze ray dragon of his

 

Jesse/ ya I see it to that’s awesome

 

Evin/nice game john *offers hand shake*

 

John/you to Evin *exepts hand shake*

 

Jaden/ *walking over to Evin* hey you Evin come here I got something for ya

 

Evin/woh your jaden yuki the king of games and you own a major corporation

 

Jaden/ya that’s me here I want you to have this card *hands him a card with a blueish green dragon with a metal hand a knee on his chest on his face on his are with a gun on his shoulder* and come visit my company some time next month after the all stars tournement

 

Evin/ok thanks I’ve never seen this card what is he “gunner dragon”

 

Jaden/I know you haven’t ever seen him he’s the only one of his kind I carry him with me because nobody who has tried to use him could and when I saw you the card it was in my deck started glowing I thought that meant you were the one who would be able to use it and I was right so keep the card see ya around Evin

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Cards from this chapter

[Ryukei]

I like them, but I think you should make one with your own characters. If you'd like, I could help you, meaning we could make one together. We could set up auditions and stuff for people who have decks and blah blah. Just PM me your answer to this..

9.4/10

[asuma181]

i am going to drop using all the others and start a new fan fic with mylast chapter as the starting chapter