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Coffee Beans & B!tchy Teens: Chapter Five is FINALLY UP! [1/11/10]


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I knew this would be worth the wait. You're yet to disapoint good fellow. Although' date=' if I may be a bit critical for a moment, upon also re-reading the first chapter, this has gone a little down-hill, it's strill brilliant mind you.

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*sigh* Unfortunatly, yes I do think the same thing. I'm losing my funny touch with this chapter. But this was just to establish plot. Next chapter is the silly wacky job interviews that Haley, Zac, and Claire go through. I promise this time, the update will be faster. Mind you though, this is the longest chapter o far.

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Nothing was WRONG with the last chapter, it was fantastic, I'm just saying, in comparison to say chapter one, it was just a little worse in my oppinion. One thing you did in chapter one that I liked was the use of music, the song playing in a place like this sets the scene so aptly.

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