yu gi oh sins of the past

[gil2m]

[spoiler=PROLOUGE ]based in the time before duel runners. abel (17 yrs old) has just been invited to join the winner's circle tournament for being the underdog with the most wins ever. able gains friends along the way towards his path of becoming the next duel monsters champoin. but sunndenly his brother Cain (thought to be dead)appears at the winners circle finals with a group he calls the 8 sins

 

[spoiler=abel]

name:abel

age:17 yrs old

ace monster:gabriel's dragon

what he looks like: he has bright red hair, he is white, he wears a black shirt and blue jacket and a pair of jeans

family:parents -deacesed

brother Cain-deacesed

background: his parents died when he was 10 in a test developing duel runners. his brother was arrested 4yrs ltr. he got into duelmonsters right before his parents died. then he vowed that he would becomeone of the best duelist in the produelist circiut so his famliy's name woud be know.

 

[spoiler=buck]

name: buck

age: 17 yrs old

ace monster: mega terra dragon

what he looks like:waers a black shirt and pants he is very laid back so melody always is getting on his case. he is also very serious when need

family: twin sister- melody

background: he has been freinds with able since they were kids. he found mega rock dragon wen he was exploring a cave with his grandpa. he also enters the pro deling circiut

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[spoiler=melody]

name:melody

age:17 yrs old

ace monster: musica the goddess of rhythm

what she looks like: she is usally seen wearing a black collared shirt and a white skirt

family: Buck- twin brother

bckground: as a young child she loved music so she started a band. the rest of the band got a good record deal that would sky rocket them to the top of the chartsbut the recod company didnt like her voice so she was kicked out. while on the same trip when buck found mega terra dragon she found the musica the goddess of rhythm card in a guitar her grandpa own. now she dreams of becoming a duel announcer.

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[spoiler=clark]

name: clark

age:20

ace monster:gabriel's dragon (before given to abel) and lucifer the fallen angel

what he looks like:he normally wears a buttoned up jacket/coat and a pair of jeans

family: unkown

background:the host of the winners' circle tournament. he is the reigning champ. wjen he was 16 yrs old (still champ) his house was broken into by ables's brother Cain. not knowing this since he was dueling at the time he gave Able his ace monster because able was such a big fan.sice cain stole clark's other ace monsters (except lucifer) he is always demanding able give him back gabriel's dragon.

 

[bury the year]

To my knowledge, there's only 7 deadly sins...

 

The plot line is rather cliche so far (Bible much?) and the fact that you haven't used the Shift key at all in your little "prologue" and have multiple spelling errors is no good sign. Extend the length and brush up on your writing, please. Also, reveal the characters during, not before the story.