yugiod9979 Posted November 1, 2007 Report Share Posted November 1, 2007 I hope theese are good Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
VainZiler Posted November 1, 2007 Report Share Posted November 1, 2007 They need a lot of card grammar work. Might I suggest looking at the "how to write a proper card effect" thread, it will help you greatly. You left out the important part of ritual cards, explaining the terms for the Ritual Summoning, you capitalized words that don't need it, and a few other things. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
joseph_downe Posted November 1, 2007 Report Share Posted November 1, 2007 well, vainziler beat me to itthese cards need a serious grammar reworkingand also the third one needs a better pictry not to choose a pic that has no background Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
myravatar Posted November 1, 2007 Report Share Posted November 1, 2007 maybe im not seeing it but i find it humorous that i do not see any dragons in the pic just an invisionment of an angel "fairy" so maybe a pic with a dragon. I understand dragon grave... but doesnt say here lies a dragon could be just another gravestone. Plus peeps dont give dragons proper burials  Overall change pics and reword your effects to what they should be Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yugiod9979 Posted November 2, 2007 Author Report Share Posted November 2, 2007 kk Thx for the comments.i'll work on it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Champster Posted November 2, 2007 Report Share Posted November 2, 2007 uh, you should activate your Account, Bud. Now about your cards...Well, its been said already, so i won't be a bother. :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yaden Yuki Posted November 2, 2007 Report Share Posted November 2, 2007 just fix the grammar and they will be something and if you activate account you can much more you know. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yugiod9979 Posted November 2, 2007 Author Report Share Posted November 2, 2007 I have i swear i just dosen't seem to show for some reason. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yugiod9979 Posted November 2, 2007 Author Report Share Posted November 2, 2007 Updated new card: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cyber Altair Posted November 2, 2007 Report Share Posted November 2, 2007 i think this new one is ok. but as for the first what vanziler said was right and don't get upset he said the same to my first set of cards. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yugiod9979 Posted November 2, 2007 Author Report Share Posted November 2, 2007 Im ok i doesn't really matter. cause i now know that what i need to improve on. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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