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What he said! That's it?

 

Also, you need to fix your grammar and make sure the whole thing makes sense. What's a "holo orb"? And what does Shade even look like? The grammar is odd. Look at the sentences and compare them to those in a real book. Don't they look...DIFFERENT?

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What he said! That's it?

 

Also' date=' you need to fix your grammar and make sure the whole thing makes sense. What's a "holo orb"? And what does Shade even look like? The grammar is odd. Look at the sentences and compare them to those in a real book. Don't they look...DIFFERENT?

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Shade is described in the last sentence of the 1st paragraph

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