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Digimon: Hopeless Paradise (Discontinued)


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Nah, the chapter's just about half way done. I think the second half of the chapter will be more challenging to write.

 

I'll have the chapter done before I go to bed tonight.

 

Looking over what I've promised for this chapter, I realize this chapter will instead be divided into seven parts. Since I've only gotten three parts done, my laptop's low on power, I've been online almost all day, and dinner's almost ready, the chapter will be up tomorrow.

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=o Very well done, Rox. I'm enjoying it so far, that much is assured.

 

Lol, Crusadermon makes me laugh. Him and his rose. xD Marluxia much?

 

And I look forward to seeing how you do the Sovereigns - seeing as how they stated that there were only "Four of Them", I'm assuming Fanglongmon is not included among them?

 

Also, do you want me to submit a character for this? I've done tons of Digimon RPs, so I have a lot of characters to choose from. @_@

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How many words do you predict this chapter having?

 

I'm not sure. It will definitely be longer than Chapter 2.

 

will my car be in here

 

Probably not.

 

=o Very well done' date=' Rox. I'm enjoying it so far, that much is assured.

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Would you consider it on par with the YCManga?

 

Lol' date=' Crusadermon makes me laugh. Him and his rose. xD Marluxia much?

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Hell yes.

 

And I look forward to seeing how you do the Sovereigns - seeing as how they stated that there were only "Four of Them"' date=' I'm assuming Fanglongmon is not included among them?

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Yes, there's just the four of them. Fanglongmon does not alongside them.

 

Also' date=' do you want me to submit a character for this? I've done tons of Digimon RPs, so I have a lot of characters to choose from. @_@

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Hmm, got any evil characters? I think I have enough good characters for now.

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@Rox: That's not for me to judge. xD I can't give an honest opinion when it comes to comparing, since as an author, I'll either think my story sucks when it's good, or will think it's good when it sucks.

 

And hmmm~. I'll see about finding an evil one.

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[quote='Roxas' pid='2381444' dateline='1245378717']
Hmm, got any evil characters? I think I have enough good characters for now.
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I had an old fanfic idea where the villains where the Great Dragons and the Sovereigns (the Glorious Alliance though this song fit them: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WtZmz5QNW10&feature=fvw) and the heros were the ultimate forms of the Seven Demon Lords (now Unexpected Hope due to their former villain status and they accept members in their rebellion). They may be of some use:


[spoiler=Glorious Alliance]
Glorious Alliance This is lead by two main factions: The 4 Digimon Sovereigns and the Four Great Dragons, with a total of seven leaders (Azulongmon playing both sides) There is internal strife between the two factions, so there is likely to be a civil war between those two factions if it wasn’t for the fact that they have to deal with Unexpected Hope.
Menbers include:

Azulongmon
The leader of the Great Dragons and Sovergiens, Azulongmon pretends to be on each of their sides but is only manipulating them in order to get more power for himself. He is extremely Prideful and would rather lose millions of men on a mission than have to admit that he’s wrong. He is attempting to take the data of hundreds of digimon in order to create Fanglongmon.

Baihumon
A member of the Digimon Sovereigns, he is extremely violent and therefore frequently goes on rampages killing many digimon. He doesn’t give a thought to this and let’s his collegues make excuses for him, claiming that those he killed are evil (in reality he killed them because they were with in a 50 ft radius of him). Mummymon is dedicated to stopping him, knowing that there is no way to reason with him. He is the most powerful member of the Sovereigns next to Azulongmon

Ebonwumon
This turtle is a member of the Digimon Sovereigns. He is one of oldest members of the Glorious Alliance and refers to everyone as sonny boy. He is extremely lazy and has legions of enslaved Infermon drag his shell where he want’s to go so he can nap when he could easily walk to where he want’s to go.

Zhuqiaomon
This phoniex is a member of the Digimon Sovereigns. He is the banker of the group, he is extremely greedy and controls the mines of the digital world, and he has a cave with piles of money the size of the empire state building, and he never shares it, ever.

Asuramon and the Devas
Powerful digimon who work for the Digimon Sovereigns. 3 of the devas work for each of the 4 sovereigns, with Asuramon leading all of them.

Megidramon
A corrupted dragon member of the Four Great Dragons, he is rarely seen because of his horrific appearance (usually taking the guise of Gallantmon) he is envious of his peers because they don’t have to wear a façade.

Goldramon
Goldramon is the second most powerful member of the Four Great Dragons (next to Azulongmon). He gets his power by absorbing huge amounts of data. He infact has large amounts of digimon working at his data farms to feed him, and hjis refusal to share is leading to the supply problems that Phelesmon is so worried about.

Mangadramon
A corrupt member of the Four Great Dragons, Mangadramon is a pervert. He constantly points out innuendos and looks at porn. He shamelessly flirts with LadyDevimon, which usually leads to him getting slashed. He occasionally devolves to Angelwoman just to ogle himself.

Fanglongmon
Fanglongmon is a powerful and ancient digimon. He is a benevolent digimon but went into hibernation from lack of fractal code which he gave up in order to provide data and land which he used to make food and land. Azulongmon wishes to summon him with the fractal code of innocent digimon in order to turn himself into Fanglongmon’s brain and control him. This will result in bad news for the rest of the digiworld.

Groundramon and Wingdramon
Two powerful dragons who work for the Four Great Dragons, own a legion of Coredramon and are capable of evolving into all their mega forms.

Along with these people there are several Darcmon, Angemon, Gargoylemon and Piddomon working for the Glorious alliance
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Yeah, I should have expanded one the minions personallity but never got that far. The problem was that I never knew what to really do with it, if anyone wants I can give you what I have of it (See what you can come up with).
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I picked up on that Royal Knights thing as well. See you fixed it now though. I saw some mistakes that confused me at first but after going back over, I managed to get what you were saying. This chapter was hilarious, and for once I wasn't hoping to finish sooner half way through. Good work.

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It's a offer, not a demand, you wanted bad guys and I thought that they may be of use.

If you want I can show you the rest, you could probbaly make a whole fanfic with that.

 

I see Roscuro hasn't shown up, maybe he'll never; oh well my loss.

 

Anyway.. I notice you are fusing at least plot points V-tamer and X evolution here. Pretty clever.

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I never did make it clear which Imperialdramon is currently being featured. Right now we're seeing Fighter Mode, not Paladin Mode. I think I can get away with Fighter Mode being a member.

 

I think I've loosely established that Susanoomon is a member. Omnimon and Gallantmon are members, and Imperialdramon Paladin Mode is the founder, so why can't Susanoomon be a member?

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Then you should be fine, though isn't it a little on the edge to make a member one mode under the founder (unless the founder split into the imperialdramon and Omnimon)v how about ClavisAngemon (though he is a natural X antibody carrier). Gaiomon? Or if you want a comic relief, I heard KingEtemon claims he is Royal Knight... Plus the Golden Rapidmon from the digimon movie is Exalted Knight Type like the other Royal Knights.

 

I hope you won't forget Ogudomon.

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