Mister Sir Posted June 23, 2009 Report Share Posted June 23, 2009 Look at what i've done.Eradication has just begun. As we sit' date='staring at the sky,I laugh loudly,and you cry. Now,I'll sit and wonder,About the many reasons,I still wander. Because all I have left,My mind,At the world's feet,And my heart. Can you hear it beat?[/quote'] I like it. I'm not a poetry buff, so I don't has much to say D: [align=center]Freestylin' - I'm on a Boat Look at me.I'm on a boat.I'm glad to seeThat it can float.I hope you knowThe water's fine.It's wet' date=' so?Just take a sip of wine. :P Idk[/align']I don't drink wine, only Santana Champagne because, it's sooooo crisp. Your drink may be crispAnd you think you're hipBut let me tell you nowYou know nothing, no how.I tell you to give you some help.So I'll stop when we run into kelp.When you act like you're hotYou're not cool cuz you're not. You gonna take that? lol j/k Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Duckmasta2020 Posted June 23, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 23, 2009 Look at what i've done.Eradication has just begun. As we sit' date='staring at the sky,I laugh loudly,and you cry. Now,I'll sit and wonder,About the many reasons,I still wander. Because all I have left,My mind,At the world's feet,And my heart. Can you hear it beat?[/quote'] I like it. I'm not a poetry buff, so I don't has much to say D: [align=center]Freestylin' - I'm on a Boat Look at me.I'm on a boat.I'm glad to seeThat it can float.I hope you knowThe water's fine.It's wet' date=' so?Just take a sip of wine. :P Idk[/align']I don't drink wine, only Santana Champagne because, it's sooooo crisp. Your drink may be crispAnd you think you're hipBut let me tell you nowYou know nothing, no how.I tell you to give you some help.So I'll stop when we run into kelp.When you act like you're hotYou're not cool cuz you're not. You gonna take that? lol j/kYeah! sup boy?! How about this? O ho! So yah think your tough.I'd bet you think of yourself as hot stuff.I hope your ready to pay the joker's feeCause I'm coming at yah with a Tiger Knee.But If you think that's all you got comin' your directionThen prepare yourself for a dose of Tiger Destruction! Sagat can freestyle as well homie. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mister Sir Posted June 23, 2009 Report Share Posted June 23, 2009 So you think you got stuff to just rhyme?Son, you ain't earned a dime.When you say that I'm weakThink that you're hard to beatYou must be caught up in your head.Remember what I just said. Not bad for a pasteh whyte boy, is it? :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sid. Posted June 23, 2009 Report Share Posted June 23, 2009 Dude you cant rhyme Cuz what i say is devineAll the time i spit sheet so fineDont waste my timeCuz your rhymes Cant even compare to my line. =OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO Im just kidding man, your pretty good :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Duckmasta2020 Posted June 23, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 23, 2009 So you think you got stuff to just rhyme?Son' date=' you ain't earned a dime.When you say that I'm weakThink that you're hard to beatYou must be caught up in your head.Remember what I just said. Not bad for a pasteh whyte boy, is it? :P[/quote'] Dude you cant rhyme Cuz what i say is devineAll the time i spit s*** so fineDont waste my timeCuz your rhymes Cant even compare to my line. =OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO Im just kidding man' date=' your pretty good :P[/quote'] looks like we got a tournament idea to go on. A freestyle Tournament. mmmm..... Ideas, Ideas.before anyones gets out of wack, Music is poetry with noise. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Toxic-skull Posted June 23, 2009 Report Share Posted June 23, 2009 what about mine? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mister Sir Posted June 23, 2009 Report Share Posted June 23, 2009 I liked both of them :3 [Termination] Dare to cross the line, butIt must dieBe true to aJerk-off just like you. Maybe it takes longerTo catch anAbsorbed a**hole. Tired of waitingI'll just play GodAnd stop you myself. Terminate the pestExterminating all the restEnding all this lifeI'll just be Godand put this to bed. Maybe it'sJust bullsh*t.You should just stopBefore you can pay. I guess you waited too long."It's only wrong if you get caught."I guess I was rightAnd nowI'll just play GodMake you go away. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mister Sir Posted June 25, 2009 Report Share Posted June 25, 2009 Bumpage Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
emonessex Posted June 25, 2009 Report Share Posted June 25, 2009 Everyone has such great poems, I'm almost afraid to post any of mine..[spoiler=The Lonely Troubadour]He has crossed deserts and climbed hillsHe has written of love, of sorrow, of thrillsHe is a poet, a lover, a nomad, and moreHe has no title, no family, a lone troubadourAnd he goes wherever his heart wills Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sid. Posted June 25, 2009 Report Share Posted June 25, 2009 Last line seems out of place. If you cut that last line out it would sound amazingly fantastic... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Toxic-skull Posted June 26, 2009 Report Share Posted June 26, 2009 i agree with sid on that Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Duckmasta2020 Posted June 26, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 26, 2009 I third that. Anyways I have an Idea for a Contest but I'm still researching the idea so it might take me another 30 mins to come up with the final outcome. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sid. Posted June 26, 2009 Report Share Posted June 26, 2009 I say we have a flow contest. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mister Sir Posted June 26, 2009 Report Share Posted June 26, 2009 ...Eh? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Duckmasta2020 Posted June 26, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 26, 2009 So I was thinking that we could have a contest where you submit two poems.One is based on one of the seven deadly sins,The other is based on the corresponding heavenly virtue.The prize would be 3 rep from me plus 50 points.Donations to increase the pot are accepted just make sure you put poem contest for the reason. I'll put up the end date when i get back from work. If you need to know the heavenly virtues that correspond to the sins you can find them here: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Seven_virtues. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sid. Posted June 26, 2009 Report Share Posted June 26, 2009 Nvm. Lol i'll just post the damn poems :P [spoiler=Greed]Dont take too much,People will hate you.Dont ask for luxury, People wont love you. You've took too much,Just because he came.Put it back now, Away with your shame. We will give you money,We will give you wealth.But remember this,We wont give you health. We will let you die,For what you want.Wealth and money,And you still flaunt. Like your the best, The best in the world,Just because you've taken,What isnt yours. Dont betray your friends,Dont betray your mother. You've taken from them, You'll never get another. Greed is distasteful,For when you want,Even if the price is bones,What rightfully isnt yours,Will make you live alone. [spoiler=Restraint]Dont release your restraint.Keep it in chains. Live it, breathe it,Away from shame. Making yourself live,Off of items too suffice,Makes you live plentiful,And helps you live life. I know its tough,I know its crazy. But in the long term,Restraint is amazing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Toxic-skull Posted June 26, 2009 Report Share Posted June 26, 2009 wait so...i don't get the 2ed one we are soupose to do.... what is heavenly virtue? is it all of them? i'll post the 7 sin one soon Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Duckmasta2020 Posted June 26, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 26, 2009 wait so...i don't get the 2ed one we are soupose to do.... what is heavenly virtue? is it all of them? i'll post the 7 sin one soon Choose one sin and write a poem about it. Then choose the corresponding, in this case the opposite, Virtue as dictated under the heavenly virtue on wikipedia and write a poem about it.For instance Ira or wrath is the one I would choose if i could. I then write a poem about it. next I look up the corresponding virtue which in this case would be Patientia or patience Aka self-control. and write a poem about it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Toxic-skull Posted June 26, 2009 Report Share Posted June 26, 2009 oh ok thanks for explaining it for me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
emonessex Posted June 27, 2009 Report Share Posted June 27, 2009 Er.. does everyone have to do this contest? I don't usually write about things like that.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sid. Posted June 27, 2009 Report Share Posted June 27, 2009 You dont have too. Its the person's choice. But its always good too try. You learn much from trying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Toxic-skull Posted June 27, 2009 Report Share Posted June 27, 2009 so when is the contest going to end? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Duckmasta2020 Posted June 27, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 27, 2009 so when is the contest going to end? July 9th ill judge and the tenth I'll post the results. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sid. Posted June 28, 2009 Report Share Posted June 28, 2009 That seems a little too far from now D: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Duckmasta2020 Posted June 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 28, 2009 That seems a little too far from now D: I know but I pretty much work non-stop till then. I'll be too exhausted to judge let alone think. It also means i'm giving you guys a couple days incase you are doing something with your family on july 4th Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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