Zimiri of the Muse Posted May 5, 2009 Report Share Posted May 5, 2009 http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/thread-116467.htmlThis is what this fan-fic is based off of.*i did not write the theory i just wrote the fan-fic.All chaps will be in first post.[spoiler=chapter -1]Cynthia: Great job ash you just beat the elite four.Oak:yes truly splendid misty,Brok ect: way to go ash.Then one by one the start to disappear. The world is black and just ash his mom and pikachu are left. Then ash's mom starts to disolve from the feet up slowly then getting faster and faster each second. She is smiling and waving good-bye. Tears are streaming down ash's cheeks he starts running to pikachu not understanding what is going on as soon as ashes fingers are centimeters from pikachu, pikachu dissapears. Ash barely opens his eyes just a slit. His mom is overjoyed jumping and crying from happiness. She saw ash's eyes open.Ash: What is going on.Mom: shhhhh just rest honey I will tell you later.To be continued... [spoiler=chapter 1 (longer) "Ash, honey come down for breakfast." Ash's mom yelled.Ash slowlly sat up in bed. He started rubbing the back of his head."Mom," Ash yelled, "please tell me what happened and where is pikachu.""Oh Ash," said his mom "you have the right to know what happened but sit down and eat your breakfast while I tell you."Ash sat down to see a big plate of bacon eggs and toast. He looked at it and then started digging in."Ash honey listen carefully while I speak. You have been unconscious for 3 years. Pikachu is now to old to battle and he has always been very weak. All of your pokemon adventures have just been dreams. Ash you have been in a coma for 3 years. Professer Oak is waiting yuo better get going.""Why is he waiting for me?" Ash asked."you are starting your new pokemon adventure you better hurry now or all the pokemon might be gone again."But before she could even finish ash had alreasy bolted out the door headed for the lab. "Hey Ash ready to start your new adventure?" Oak asked."You bet I am professor!"Ash said happily."well then pick from any of these 50 pokeballs."Oak said."50?" ash said there are supposed to be three? ash asked."yes normally but we have re-constructed your favorite pokemon from your coma." Oak said."Pikachu." ash said."I'm sorry ash but pikachu is... to be continued Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zimiri of the Muse Posted May 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 5, 2009 plz if you read comment Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darkerai Posted May 5, 2009 Report Share Posted May 5, 2009 It's a good start...no flaws so far...write more...sorry hard to coment when there hasn't been much done... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skuldur Posted May 5, 2009 Report Share Posted May 5, 2009 It's way, way, way, way too short. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zimiri of the Muse Posted May 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 6, 2009 yes i know i was in a hurry Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted May 6, 2009 Report Share Posted May 6, 2009 yes i know i was in a hurry Then don't post it. Look it over before posting. Check grammar and spelling (there are too many of those mistakes)' date=' format ([i']never[/i] use script), and length (way too short to even be considered a chapter). Add description and things like that. Please. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zimiri of the Muse Posted May 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 6, 2009 new chap longer but hey im not used to fan fic's i have been rp'ing to long Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darkerai Posted May 6, 2009 Report Share Posted May 6, 2009 Wait! if they just recreated his pokemon why couldn't they just snag any random pickachu??? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zimiri of the Muse Posted May 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 6, 2009 JUST WAIT each pokemon has certain characteristics that are re-created now just wait Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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