Andinator Posted May 2, 2009 Report Share Posted May 2, 2009 Hey Peepoes! This is sorta a sequel to .:Midnight Thief:.'s Fan-fic, with permission, though only his main character actually recurs. Unlike other fanfics, if this one becomes popular, I will release versions from a different perspective (for now, we'll stick with Sora). Also, if you want to have me include a character from FF or disney, pm me and ill consider it). So without further ado, Lets get started: [spoiler=Theme Song] [spoiler=Prolouge]I could remember it as if it was yesterday. Fighting alongside Riku against Xemnas. But that was nearly a year ago. I highly anticipate my birthday as Riku and I plan on going to Disney Castle and see Donald and Goofy again. But recently, weird things have began to happen. I keep on having nightmares about the Organization, even though we beat them. I'm also starting to hallucinate, seeing black cloaked people that no one else seems to see, not even Riku. I wonder if... *knock*knock* "Sora honey, its getting late" Ok, mom" Sora replies Sora quickly falls asleep, only to have the same nightmare. Almost suddenly, Sora feels a tug on his shirt "Ughhh", he moans. "What the, why are you here King?" "Shhhhh. Follow me, and keep your voice down. They're listening" "Who's listening?" questions Sora "Shhhhh, I'll tell you later. For now, go to the Secret Place." "Why?" "Just go, we're running out of time" orders the king "Ok." Before long, Sora arrives at the secret place, only to see Riku fight with a person hiding under a black cloak. "So you are real.", yell Sora, "We took down you guys a year ago, so why are you still here. And why have you been hiding yourself from everyone else?" "..." Seeing his chance, Riku attempts to strike down the hooded man. Anticipating this, he dissappears into the darkness only to reappear from behind Riku and strike him accross the back. Seeing that Riku is unable to move, the hooded menace opens up a portal and begins to walk through it. "Where do you think you're going" Sora demands "It is not a matter of what place I am going to, but what time." replies the calmly hooded man. A confused look sprouts from Sora's face "While youre thinking about that, you might as well entertain." As the man leaves, he calls for three Twilight Thorn to guard the Entrance, stalling Sora, each perfectly blocking the others weak area. Riku also gets back up, and King Mickey appears, both with an intention of taking them down. After being worn out and unable to, the three retreat "Who was that" Sora asks "He is one of the 6 members of the 'Neo Organization" replied the King "Neo?" thinks Riku "Yes, that means new, remade, re.." the King rattles "No, thats not what i was thinking about. But anyways, what does the Neo Organization want?" "I'm not sure, but I believe they're planning to revive the orginal members." responds the King "How are they gonna do that" wonders Sora "I don't know, but for now, we just need to stop them before they do." advises the King "Alright, the lets do this!" Sora replies with anitcipation [spoiler=Chapter 1: Out of sight, out of mind]After a while of walking and silence, the King starts, ““It’s getting late. You two better get some rest if you plan on defeating this Neo Organization” Sora begins to complain, “But we’re losing time and…” “The King’s right, we can’t beat them without sleep” Riku adds “Fine” moans Sora As Sora enters back into his house through his window, He notices that his journal is open. Sora quickly walks over to see why. Apparently, all of his entries are missing. “Mom, did you take my journal entries again?” No one replies. Worried that something might have happened, he walks downstairs. He notices that nobody’s home. “That’s weird, they don’t usually go out that late.” Sora hears footsteps coming from his front door. Afraid that it’s a member of the Neo Organization, he hides. He sees his parent’s walk in, crying, dressed in black. Confused, Sora comes out of his hiding place “What’s wrong mom?” “Oh, I could almost here him” his mother wails “Please don’t do this again” His father comforts Even more confused than before, Sora notices a picture, one that he was originally in earlier on that day, but was missing. Completely confused and slightly fearful, Sora decides to pay a visit to Riku and the King. But when he arrives, the King is nowhere in sight. Noticing Riku trying to comfort Kairi by the three, Sora decides to join in. “Hey guys, there’s been something weird goin…” “I don’t get it. How can someone just disappear?” Kairi asks beneath her tears “I don’t know, but I they found his body, and they found it dead.” Riku explains Seeing that not even Riku notices him, Sora leaves, though not before hearing Kairi wail “He was almost 16. Its not his time. ITS NOT HIS TIME!” Then Sora remembered: "It is not a matter of what place I am going to, but what time." "Seeing from your face change, i guess you figured it out" replies the same hooded man "You did something to me in the past. What did you do!?" demanded an enraged Sora "If I told you, then you'd try to fix it. Non of your little friends can help you now. Because if what i did to you, Riku and the King no longer even remember what happened earlier this night. So they won't come to help you. And especially not now, when your gonna need it most!" "What do you mean" Sora ask A portal opens up, and another hooded man appears, much Burlier than the last. "Well, we can't have you come around and stop us no can we", says the original hooded man as he walks away into the portal "The names Xiks, and your time is up Sora" says the remaining hooded man... Sorry to leave you guys hanging, but thats the end of chapter 1 Thats all for now, more to come! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skuldur Posted May 2, 2009 Report Share Posted May 2, 2009 Oooooooooooooh I like what I see. Keep it up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Andinator Posted May 2, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 2, 2009 Thanks 4 posting. also, updated with a titlescreen Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nexev Posted May 2, 2009 Report Share Posted May 2, 2009 Pretty good, I think you might need a better theme song but can't think of a good replacement.Something about the revival of evil or something. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Andinator Posted May 2, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 2, 2009 I'll try to find one Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fen. Posted May 2, 2009 Report Share Posted May 2, 2009 Delicious. It made me lick my lips for more. You do give my fanfic a good name here, Andy. I cannot wait for more. Very good for your first time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Andinator Posted May 2, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 2, 2009 thanks, I'm working on a chapter 1 just now Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fen. Posted May 2, 2009 Report Share Posted May 2, 2009 BTW, who was the guy in the hood? Which member was it? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Andinator Posted May 2, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 2, 2009 thats a secret, I'll tell you though if you pm me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fen. Posted May 2, 2009 Report Share Posted May 2, 2009 I like the first chapter. But here's some advice. Use some detail to describe places sora is. Paint a picture in our heads. Don't overdo it, that's called detail whoring. I like where this is going and the plot catches my eye. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Andinator Posted May 2, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 2, 2009 yea, my mind goes real fast, so I usually have problems with that Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fen. Posted May 2, 2009 Report Share Posted May 2, 2009 It's a common mistake writers have. Your ideas are very fresh though. This is a new plot, not cut and paste like other KH Fanfics. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Andinator Posted May 3, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 3, 2009 Updated with participation stuff Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Haseo Posted May 3, 2009 Report Share Posted May 3, 2009 Epicness! Very good Fanfic. I cannot wait for the other chapters keep up the good work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luna Diviner Posted May 3, 2009 Report Share Posted May 3, 2009 It's a common mistake writers have. Your ideas are very fresh though. This is a new plot' date=' not cut and paste like other KH Fanfics.[/quote']You take that back... Wow, really good but space it out plz. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nexev Posted May 3, 2009 Report Share Posted May 3, 2009 Yours is original too, after all yours is the only one with the neo-organization as good guys. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fen. Posted May 3, 2009 Report Share Posted May 3, 2009 Exactly, I din't mean Nagato's, so I'm sorry if that offended you. This sie is actually very good with KH fanfics. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Andinator Posted May 3, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 3, 2009 @Nexev: Actually, in my fan-fic, technically nobody is the Hero or villain. since After this I will have the same story from different point's of view, even sora will have to become the bad guy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Smear Posted May 4, 2009 Report Share Posted May 4, 2009 ... I like it.. I never usually like Fan-Fics. But this is an exception. Can't wait for chapter 2! ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Andinator Posted May 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 4, 2009 thank you. glad to see that this is going sooo well Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted May 5, 2009 Report Share Posted May 5, 2009 Sweet.Sora,missing.I like it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Smear Posted May 7, 2009 Report Share Posted May 7, 2009 Sweet.Sora' date='missing.I like it.[/quote'] Sora's not missing, Sora doesnt even exist =oI'm pretty sure it says that atleast. :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted May 8, 2009 Report Share Posted May 8, 2009 Yeah Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Recommended Posts
Archived
This topic is now archived and is closed to further replies.