Fallen Hero Posted April 27, 2009 Report Share Posted April 27, 2009 ok but you put my character has have light blue hair when it's more silver/grey Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Soul Legacy Posted April 27, 2009 Report Share Posted April 27, 2009 Awsome!, spellcaster!, in your faces everyone! :D O.O, sorry, just got excited.......... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fallen Hero Posted April 27, 2009 Report Share Posted April 27, 2009 you may be a spellcaster but are your reflexes good enough to stop a bullet :twisted: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Soul Legacy Posted April 27, 2009 Report Share Posted April 27, 2009 Probably :), but that doesn't mean shes invincible........ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted April 27, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 27, 2009 Alright, Fallen Hero, I'll edit that part, I didn't really get a good look at you character's hair color. Soul Legacy, you are right...you aren't invinceible but you do have good reflexes and agility... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fallen Hero Posted April 27, 2009 Report Share Posted April 27, 2009 thats ok omega. it does sort of look light blue when you take a quick glimpse of the picture. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted April 27, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 27, 2009 Alright, chapter 2 is complete! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fallen Hero Posted April 27, 2009 Report Share Posted April 27, 2009 there are a few thinks to correct:"I'm Diomedes Xion, sir..." he said, he had a sort of gey-silverish color of hair= you missed the r in greyhe turned, and behind him was Alxis and J, as his 'prisoner'...= is it Alxis or Blood that's suppose to be a prisoner and the one that you need to correct most of all is this sentence:So they all did their best to believe Agas, but secretly, they didn't, except for M+.My character never keeps secrets so thats was one major mistake to put he secretly doesn't believe Agas. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted April 27, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 27, 2009 ...*Sigh* I'll take that in. Also, don't you remember? J (or rather, Jay) and Blood (Koruda_ are two different people, it was both Alexis and J... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Christian Exodia Posted April 27, 2009 Report Share Posted April 27, 2009 Can't wait for Chap. 3. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted April 27, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 27, 2009 I will post it tomorrow. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fallen Hero Posted April 27, 2009 Report Share Posted April 27, 2009 it's good that you fixed the main mistake so good good Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Soul Legacy Posted April 28, 2009 Report Share Posted April 28, 2009 Intense part 2 of chapter 2 XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted April 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 28, 2009 CHapter 3 is up! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fallen Hero Posted April 28, 2009 Report Share Posted April 28, 2009 It's a good chapter. I guessing the next one will have more action in it which I can't wait for. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted April 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 28, 2009 Then be a bit more patient, please. I'll post it tomorrow, I'll need time to make up the stratrgies... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted April 29, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 29, 2009 Chapter 4 is up!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fallen Hero Posted April 29, 2009 Report Share Posted April 29, 2009 very nice chapter, i like my character a lot. keep up the good work Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted April 29, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 29, 2009 Thanks, I tried to make your character as calm and cool as possible... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fallen Hero Posted April 29, 2009 Report Share Posted April 29, 2009 I think you did very well in doing that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted April 29, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 29, 2009 Thanks :D Next chapter will be up tomorrow of course... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fallen Hero Posted April 29, 2009 Report Share Posted April 29, 2009 good good. well right now i'm going to see if your DMD fan fic doesn't scramble my brain again. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted April 29, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 29, 2009 Kuja hasn't been replying my part of Chapter 4 often... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fallen Hero Posted April 29, 2009 Report Share Posted April 29, 2009 I think his internet is still faulty so that maybe the reason why he hasn't replied. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Soul Legacy Posted April 30, 2009 Report Share Posted April 30, 2009 Nice Chapter 3 and 4, Agas showed them ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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