Master52394 Posted April 25, 2009 Report Share Posted April 25, 2009 Well, I have written this pokemon FanFic hoping that you guys will like it. Any improvements or questions let me know. Thanks ~ Master52394 Chapter 1 “Hey you, I wanna challenge you to a pokemon battle,” said Chase. “Fine by me, how about just a one on one pokemon battle?” replied Brian. “I only compete in three on three pokemon battles, so take it or leave it.” “Whatever, it doesn’t matter to me… Chase… right?” “Yeah, and when I beat you everyone will be cheering my name,” said Chase. “To my side Arcanine!” announced Chase. “Not bad Chase. Dusknoir rise!” called Brian. “The first move is yours Chase.” “Very well, go Arcanine, go ahead and use your flamethrower attack on Dusknoir.” Chase said. The attack hit Dusknoir right on the money. But once the attack cleared, Dusknoir appeared to have taken no battle damage at all. “Wait that attack was supposed to send your pokemon running scared.” commented Chase. “Looks like your pokemon just can’t compete with the big boys. Now Dusknoir, attack using Dark Pulse.” The attack fired all the way from one side of the park to the other. It sent Arcanine flying through the air and on its back is how it landed. Chase wasn’t too happy about this. “Arcanine, return. You did a good job my friend. Grr, to my side Luxray. Destroy that Dusknoir with your Discharge attack!” Chase commanded. “Take it straight on Dusknoir.” Brian countered. “There is no way that your Dusknoir will survive against the awesome electrifying attacks of my Luxray. Super charge it Luxray.” The pokemon fired with all of it’s heart, and when the attack was finished, Dusknoir still remained where he was the entire battle. “There is just no way.” Brian had left Chase speechless. “Let’s wrap this round up with Earthquake.” The ghost type pokemon had released his attach and nothing happened. Suddenly, the ground began to open up and the rocks went flying towards Luxray. When the damage was done and cleared, Luxray was unable to battle. Chase recalled him to his pokeball for a nice long rest. “Seems to me that you only have one pokemon left Chase.” Brian commented. “Yeah but it’s one of my better pokemon. To my side Salamence!” Chase commanded. The dragon pokemon emerged gracefully and took to the skies. “Dusknoir, use Gravity now!” “That won’t stop Salamence. Your strategic attacks won’t beat my sheer power attacks, go Salamence and use your Fire Blast.” The attack launched for Dusknoir and had no intention of stopping. “Counter it with Dark Pulse now.” They attacks collided in mid air. There was a big cloud of smoke on the battle field. When it cleared both pokemon were still standing.” “Alright Dusknoir, wrap this battle up with another Earthquake attack.” “That will never work! My pokemon is in mid air and can’t be reached by any ground type attack.” said Chase overconfidently. Just then the earth shards spiked up and hit Salamence. “How is any of this possible? My pokemon is immune to ground type attacks.” Asked Chase. “Simple, remember when I used Gravity? Well, whenever I use that attack it makes it so ground type attacks hit any pokemon that are immune to ground type attacks for five attacks. In simpler terms, you lost this battle Chase.” This can’t be happening. I have never lost a battle in my life. Brian, I would like you to teach me the ways of your battle style. Will you come with me as I try to compete in the Master’s League?” Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted April 25, 2009 Report Share Posted April 25, 2009 No. Just no. This kid, who we have no prior information of, has beaten a person who has never lost in their life? Your character reeks of Stu-dom. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Master52394 Posted April 26, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 26, 2009 Chapter 2 Is Up: “You know, I would love to. Return Dusknoir.” ordered Brian. “So what pokemon gym were you thinking of challenging first?” asked Brian. “I was going to fly on my Salamence to the gym in Tampa Bay. It’s only about a 45 minutes flight from here. So how old are you anyways? I’m 13 by the way.” said Chase. “I’m 14 and I think we should get moving if you wanna challenge the gym by the end of this afternoon.” Said Brian. “So do you have a pokemon to ride on or would you like a lift on Salamence with me? “Oh that’s ok, I have my own dragon type pokemon. Rise Dragonite.” Commanded Brian. “To my side Salamence! Well, let’s get going.” Said Chase 40 Minutes Later “So do you know what type of pokemon you’re going to be up against Chase?” asked Brian “Not really, but I’m sure it will be no problem. What type does that gym raise, since you mentioned it?” asked Chase. “Well, the Gym Leader, Jamie, raises bug type pokemon. Now he is only 5, but he is the master of all bug type pokemon. Well there is the gym now.” When they landed they retracted their pokemon back into their pokeballs and they looked at it. It was like walking into a museum. It displayed stone statues of bug pokemon as you walked in. “Can I help you?” asked a little girl from behind a desk. “Yes, I’m here to challenge Jamie, the bug type pokemon master, “Would you please walk through the doors and here is a copy of the rules for the Tampa Bay Pokemon Gym.” It read this: Each trainer is only aloud 4 pokemon. The battle is over when one trainer’s pokemon are just unable to battle. Only the challenger is aloud to make pokemon substitutions. Please sign at the bottom and return to Alexandra, the referee before the battle making sure that you understand all of the rules and regulations. Any and all questions are to be asked at this time. The girl that was working behind the desk was now wearing an official Master’s League Referee Jersey with the name tag reading Alexandra. Chase signed the card and gave it to her. “Thank you. And now presiding is Bug Master Jamie. He came in through the doors on the other side of the field. “Alright,” said Alexandra. “As we know this is a 4 on 4 pokemon battle in which you are able to use the forest terrain and if the challenger, Chase, is the victor, then he shall receive the Wasp Badge.” Gym Leader chooses his pokemon first and then the challenger follows.” “I begin with Butterfree.” Said Jamie “Fine with me Jamie. To my side Walrein.” A giant walrus appeared in front of Chase and the battle was about to begin. “Go Walrein, use Ice Beam now!” commanded Chase “Use your gust attack to blow it down.” It was no use. Chase’s attack was just too powerful and it had knocked Butterfree unconscious. “Butterfree is unable to battle and the winner is Walrein,” announced Alexandra. “Fine then, I will go with Beedrill,” said Jamie. “Now attack with Poison Sting.” “Walrein, take it like a man and counter attack with Hyper Beam.” Beedrill was reaching the end of it’s ropes when right before the bee pokemon was struck, Jamie commanded that Beedrill use Destiny Bond. The Ice Beam attack hit and there was a explosion. Then the smoke cleared. “Both pokemon are unable to battle,” said Alexandra. “But how is that even possible when he never launched any physical attack on my Walrein?” Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kendo Fish Posted April 27, 2009 Report Share Posted April 27, 2009 Yes, this reeks of typical, uninteresting Gary Stu-ness. if you don't know what that is, look it up. First of all, where does this take place? There's a Tampa Bay in the Pokemon world? What the heck? And what region is this? What does everything look like? Describe better. Second, what's going on? You just say "Hey lets battle" and go straight into a match with no description at all! Third, nobody shows any emotion, or at least hardly. They almost always just use periods at the end of their sentences, and they're uninteresting professionals at Pokemon. Fourth, why is Walrein so strong he can defeat a Gym Leader's Pokemon in one hit when they used an attack to block it? That's cheapo, yo. I'll edit this post later. PAY ATTENTION TO PEOPLES' COMMENTS OR ELSE PEOPLE WILL LOSE INTEREST FAST. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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