cacnea Posted April 19, 2009 Report Share Posted April 19, 2009 This is just an overview of a yugioh fanfic i have in mind...[spoiler=Intro:]We will merge,We will strive,We will Survive...Yu-Gi-Oh! GO! GO! We have to fight,It's all that's right,Shining as the light...Let's GO! GO! Yu-Gi-Oh! On your marks, get set,Let's GO! GO! Yu-Gi-Oh! We have all the might,We're coming into sight,So let's go, let's Shout,We're breaking OUT. We will merge,We will strive,And, We will Survive...Yu-Gi-Oh! GO! GO! In the not too far future new cards are being made, synthetic cards, which could destroy the world, and only duelists can stop them...(to explain the synthetic cards summon monsters like from the shadow realm meaning that they could kill people, but the cards can only be destroyed in a duel, when synthetic monsters are destroyed the cards turn to dust.) [spoiler=Max Rhodric]Max Rhodric is a 15 year old duelist who, has used his "Totem" deck ever since he could remember. He strives to be the best but always puts his friends first, even above his beloved deck.[spoiler=Deck][spoiler=Terramancer Draco: Kristall's effect]1 Tuner + "Terramancer Draco" or "Terramancer Draco - Gaiaform"While this Card is on your side of the Field you can not summon any other Dragon type monsters. When this card is destroyed choose either "Terramancer Draco" or "Terramancer Draco - Gaiaform" and add it to your Hand. [spoiler=Zak Yuney]Zak Yuney is 16 years old and uses his legendary "Dorogon" Deck. He doesn't care about anybody else, he only cares about being the best duelist.[spoiler=Deck][spoiler=Aeromancer Draco: Kristall's effect]1 Tuner + "Aeromancer Draco" or "Aeromancer Draco - Altitude"While this Card is on your side of the Field you can not summon any other Dragon type monsters. When this card is destroyed choose either "Aeromancer Draco" or "Aeromancer Draco - Altitude" and add it to your Hand. [spoiler=Max and Zak]Max and Zak are enemies as well as mutual friends, like there cards they are locked in battle with each other, but unite to summon the almighty "Dorogon Totem". [spoiler=Hiroto Maina]Hiroto Maina is one of Max's friends, he is 16 and uses a "Dager-" theme deck, and uses a silver 00 Duel Teck. He is very over confident and big headed..[spoiler=Deck][spoiler=Pyromancer Draco: Kristall's effect]1 Tuner + "Pyromancer Draco" or "Pyromancer Draco - Infernal"While this Card is on your side of the Field you can not summon any other Dragon type monsters. When this card is destroyed choose either "Pyromancer Draco" or "Pyromancer Draco - Infernal" and add it to your Hand.[spoiler=Dagertana Effect]1 Tuner + 1 or more Machine type non-Tuner monsters Once per turn, you can send 1 Machine Type Monster from your hand to the Graveyard to add 1 Machine Type Monster from your Graveyard to your hand. When this card is sent from the field to the Graveyard, you can return all Monsters with "Dager-" in their name from your Graveyard to your Deck. [spoiler=Kiya Teyanoto]Kiya Teyanoto is another of Max's friends, she is 15 years old and uses a Spellcaster type deck. Her Duel Teck is a silver 00 Duel Teck. She has a crush on Max who is completely oblivious to it, but when she duels, she duels with all her heart..[spoiler=Deck][spoiler=Aquamancer Draco: Kristall's effect]1 Tuner + "Aquamancer Draco" or "Aquamancer Draco - Submerge"While this Card is on your side of the Field you can not summon any other Dragon type monsters. When this card is destroyed choose either "Aquamancer Draco" or "Aquamancer Draco - Submerge" and add it to your Hand. [spoiler=???] A character who will be featured after the Synthetic Arc... [spoiler=Deck][spoiler=Razar's Effect]1 Tuner + 1 or more non-Tuner monstersThis card is unaffected by Spell cards. During battle between this attacking card and a Defense Position monster whose def is lower than the atk of this card, inflict the difference as Battle Damage to your opponent's Life Points. When this card is destroyed pay 500 life points to return this card to your Extra Deck. [spoiler=Aticule Nedrasa]Aticule Nedrasa is president of Nedrasa Industries, and authorized the production of the synthetic cards, his favourite card being "Blue Eyes Homunculus". He has hired backstreet duelists to test drive his synthetic cards, and to beat any duelists who pose a threat to him. He uses his "Synthisized Duel Teck" which is a dark purple colour and has three tubes that connect to his arm.[spoiler=Deck] [spoiler=Duel Teck]Duel Tecks are round machines that clip onto a belt that duelists use. When activated Duel Tecks become duel disk-like that you can wear via a glove attached to it. Max and Zak use 01 Duel Tecks (the latest models) which are white with silver accents and with Max's having a blue stripe down the middle and Zak's having a red stripe. 00 Duel Tecks change colour with the skill of the duelist, colours from weakest to strongest, white - silver - black - black with green accents (called a Gravi-Duel Teck). [spoiler=Synthetic Cards]Synthetic cards are a combination of a normal monster and an effect monster. For example "Blue Eyes Homonculus" is a combination of "Blue Eyes White Dragon" and "Golden Homonculus" with Blue Eyes's atk, Golden Homonculus's def and effect, but the card being yellow in colour.Image credit for "Blue Eyes Homunculus" legendhiro. [spoiler=Legend of the Totem and the Dorogon]Legend of the Totem and the Dorogon: "And the Beasts fought the Spirits for their power, hundred and score of four they spent in battles, unto the Spirits locked themselves away and so the Beasts went and slept, but the two will come of man to fight one unto the Spirits and one unto the Beasts..."Spirits = the TotemBeasts = the Dorogon [spoiler=Neo White Dragon]This is the rare Neo White Dragon, which will play a strong part in the story...*When this card is destroyed by the effect of a Spell card, you can special summon one "Synchro" monster to your side of the field. *When this card is destroyed by a monster card's effect you can special summon one "Blue Eyes White Dragon" to your side of the field from your Hand or Deck. *When this card is destroyed by a Trap card you can draw two cards. [spoiler=[b]Chapter 1: Enemies Meet, Enemies DUEL![/b]]Max Rhodric, a 15 year old duelist in Muto City, and as well as great skill, he will soon realise he has a great destiny."I now synchronize Totem Wolf and Totem Eagle Warrior,Dark Depths of my Soul! Shining out to Fight for the Right! Synchro Summon! Strike Now! Dark Shatter the Totem Warrior!" called out Max, "SCREEEEEEEEEEEEECHHHHH","Now because of Totem Removal's effect that means Totem Wolf and Totem Eagle Warrior are removed from play, which increases Dark Shatter's atk to 1800, I now play Totem Pole which gives Dark Shatter an atk total of 2300, Now destroy his M-Warrior #1","You lose" Max said finishing the duel as the other lad groans.Later as he walked down the street Hiroto Maina ran up to him, "Come on Max! Your missing it","Whatam i missing?" Max asked as he was being dragged behind Hiroto,"Zak Yuney,","Who's he?""WHAT!?, Zak Yuney is like one of the best duelists ever, his Dorogon deck is legendary","Ok, ok i'm coming" Max said as he started running beside Hiroto. As they turned a corner for the umpteenth time, Max saw the massive crowd of peopl watching the duel. As he managed to push his way to the front he saw a guy in a black leathery jacket, and another guy in a shirt with glasses."I play Mind Master in defence mode, 200 def, and end my turn" the guy in glasses said,"I summon Lance Dorogon, in atk mode with 1800 atk, now I atk your Mind Master, and because of Lance Dorogon's effect, 'When this card attacks a Defense Position monster, whose DEF is lower than the ATK of this card, inflict the difference as Battle Damage to your opponent.' you lose 1600 life points, wiping out your last 1000 life points and I win" The guy in the black leather jacket said."Max, that's Zak Yuney" Hiroto said pointing to the guy in th black jacket,"Now who will challenge me next" Zak called out to the crowd, there was some shuffling but nobody challenged him untill one 15 year old called out "I will", so Max walked into the opening were Zak was, he unclipped his Duel Teck, threw it and called out "Duel Teck Activate", then slipped his hand into the glove, and with that the duel was on."I'll go first, I summon Totem Bear in def mode with 1400 def and I end" Max said,"I summon Shine Dorogon in atk mode with 1400 atk, and play this card face down, your move" Zak replied."Ok, I summon Totem Turtle in def mode with 1400 def, and I activate the spell card Dark Totem, now every monster with Totem in it's name is changed to DARK attribute and gain 200 atk and def, now I end" Max finished with a smirk."I activate [spoiler=[b]Chapter 2: Magic & Machines[/b]]Coming Soon! [spoiler=[b]Chapter 3: Synthetic Rule[/b]]Coming Soon! Here is a competition, i need another character for one of Max's friends, so come up with a name and a background story and the best will be included in Yu-Gi-Oh! GO!, the character will use "Neo White Dragon" and various other cards. The winner will also get three points... So what do you think???Note: i am english and so everything i write is in it's proper english spelling...Plz Rate and Vote... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
starly Posted April 19, 2009 Report Share Posted April 19, 2009 10/10 kiddo very good qaulity Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted April 19, 2009 Report Share Posted April 19, 2009 Let's rate an intro, shall we(and fix sum grammar)? This is just an overview of a yugioh fanfic i have in mind...Intro:We will merge' date='We will strive,We will Survive...Yu-Gi-Oh! GO! GO!We have to fight,It's all that's right,We will Survive...Let's GO! GO! Yu-Gi-Oh!We have all the might,We coming into sight,So let's go, let's Shout,We're breaking OUT,We will merge,We will strive,We will Survive...Yu-Gi-Oh! GO! GO! [i']Not many people are so willing to write a song to the story, so no matter how weird it is it shows how much you want to write. Good job.[/i] In the not too far future new cards are being made, synthetic cards, which could destroy the world, and only duelists can stop them... I don't get it. Do they summon REAL dudes? And if only duelists can stop them, then why does fire exist? :T Max Rhodric is a 15 year old duelist who has used his "Totem" deck ever since he could remember. He strives to be the best, but always puts his friends first, even above his beloved deck. You forgot a comma. I'd like to see what the totems are based around. Zak Yuney is 16 years old and uses his legendary "Dorogon" Deck. He doesn't care about anybody else he only cares about being the best duelist. "He doesn't care about anybody else. He only cares about..." How did you miss this? Maybe you should proofread the next chapter. But DOROGON? That sounds like Doraemon!! Is the deck based around cats with 4-D pockets? That being said, I want to know what the heck a dorogon is supposed to be. Max and Zak are enemys aswell as mutual friends, like there cards they are locked in battle with each other, but unite to summon the almighty "Dorogon Totem". Spell check. ENEMIES AS WELL. But if the one guy only cares about himself, then why id he friends with the other kid? Aticule Nedrasa is president of Nedrasa Industries, and authorised the production of the synthetic cards, his favourite card being "Blue Eyes Homonculus". He has hired backstreet duelists to test drive his synthetic cards, and to beat any duelists who pose a threat to him. I won't criticize you for using the English spelling of favorite, but you got 'authorized' and 'humonculus' wrong. At least I'm pretty sure you got humonculus wrong. So this guy's just an evil sadist? I'm in. Duel Tecks are round machines that clip onto a belt that duelists use. When activated Duel Tecks become duel disks that you can wear via a glove attached to the duel disks. Max and Zak use 01 Duel Tecks which are white with silver accents and with Max's having a blue stripe down the middle and Zak's having a red stripe. 00 Duel Tecks change colour with the skill of the duelist, colours from weakest to strongest, white - silver - black - black with green accents. IT'S TECH UNLESS YOU LIKE IT MORE WITH A 'K'. JUST SO YOU KNOW.BUT WHAT?!Duel Tecks become duel disks that you can wear via a glove attached to the duel disks.Duel disks ON your OLD duel disks?! That's a waste of money!! What do they do differently?! That being said, I like how you described all of the different types. Synthetic cards are a fusion of a normal monster and an effect monster. for example "Blue Eyes Homonculus" is a fusion of "Blue Eyes White Dragon" and "Golden Homonculus" with Blue Eyes's atk, Golden Homonculus's def and effect, but the card being yellow in colour. NOW it makes sense. But that's not incredibly awesome, is it? Do they still count as FUSION monsters or are they monsters with crappily high stars? In fact it would be better if it started out at 1500, THEN went up to 3000 when placed onto the field. That way he'd be searchable by Shining Angel. But overall, it's not a very creative idea, to tell you the truth. I was expecting for you to tell me that they kill people when summoned, or something like that. So what do you think??? Well, I think that if your quality doesn't change, mostly noobs will read this instead of most other members. But if you go back and edit your post, then I'll be satisfied. But I'm looking forward to what your theme song can and WILL accomplish!! Intro: 6.5/10 due to overwhelming confusion. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cacnea Posted April 19, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 19, 2009 Zak Yuney is like Seto Kaiber he only cares about him self but he helps the otheres, and thank you for your helpfull critique...The "Dorogon" are a race of dragons, the name comes from the japanese pronuctiation "Doragon" which means Dragon...The "Duel Teck" name is like "Duel Disk" as disc is spelt with a c, so i just made it different, and what i got the description wrong, i'll use pictures to show you... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
starly Posted April 20, 2009 Report Share Posted April 20, 2009 cool still even the grammer is ok Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cacnea Posted April 20, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 20, 2009 I will keep updating this in little bits every couple of days as this is a work in progress... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
starly Posted April 21, 2009 Report Share Posted April 21, 2009 kk buddy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted April 21, 2009 Report Share Posted April 21, 2009 The blue-eyes homunculus is the only thing I hate now. It looks...WIERD!! I'd like it to have the humonculus's color or something, since it looks SACRY! But everything else is okay now. I'm looking forward to the first chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cacnea Posted April 22, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 22, 2009 I know the blue eyes homunculus doesn't look so good so ill try and get that fixed... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
starly Posted April 22, 2009 Report Share Posted April 22, 2009 it looks alright Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
legendhiro Posted April 22, 2009 Report Share Posted April 22, 2009 i'd read this Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
legendhiro Posted April 22, 2009 Report Share Posted April 22, 2009 you can use this for your blue-eyes homunculus if you want. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cacnea Posted April 22, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 22, 2009 Wow thnx, that is really good, thank you legendhiro... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
legendhiro Posted April 22, 2009 Report Share Posted April 22, 2009 no problem. if you need any more combo monsters like that let me know. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
starly Posted April 23, 2009 Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 hey what about me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cacnea Posted April 24, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 24, 2009 I need more people to view this or i might have to close this down... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
legendhiro Posted April 25, 2009 Report Share Posted April 25, 2009 write some of it and you'll get more people. many members don't comment on a fanfic until some of it is actually posted.more than just what you have too. its good, but it doesn't have a lot to it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
legendhiro Posted April 26, 2009 Report Share Posted April 26, 2009 don't worry about payment. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cacnea Posted April 27, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 27, 2009 Awesome thanx... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
legendhiro Posted April 27, 2009 Report Share Posted April 27, 2009 no prob Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cacnea Posted April 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 28, 2009 Bump... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cacnea Posted April 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 28, 2009 I have added a lot of cards to the characters decks and i plan to add some more to chapter one in the morning Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted April 30, 2009 Report Share Posted April 30, 2009 I think that it's okay but I hate the fact that people have to recite poetry to Synchro Summon. It kinda lost all importance when it left the show. Otherwise, check ALMOST ALL of your grammar and it's a good, but short, start. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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