Zexaeon Posted April 23, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 HOLY CRAP DARTH. xD Thank you very much. I hope not to disappoint. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted April 23, 2009 Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 So far that's...two Mods that have read this. We need more Mods to read this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Icy Posted April 23, 2009 Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 So far that's...two Mods that have read this. We need more Mods to read this. I'll get Rose to read this when she gets online xD. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
六兆年と一夜物語 Posted April 23, 2009 Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 [align=center]Really enjoying it. Forced suicide, eh? Can't wait for the next chapter.[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aelsthla-Mental Posted April 23, 2009 Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 Clair looked to him. "Actually, yeah, you haven;t really elaborate don that." Slight errors there, nothing special, just thought I'd point them out. So transparency was the key... But how was the magic required for that concealed? Is it just concealing doesn't even leave a magic trail? Anyway, brilliant. Forced suicide was a nice touch (why do they even bother with those red shirts LOL) and combat! Looks pretty good, this chapter has shown a lot (if not all) of the plot, short of plot twists :). Well, good luck! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zexaeon Posted April 23, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 Ah, yes, sorry for the typos. I have a bad habit of accidentally hitting keys right next to one another (such as ; and ') without noticing. And sometimes I'll get ahead of myself and press the space bar too quickly without realizing it. Problem is, my processor doesn't always catch those errors (especially seeing as how elaborate and don are both words, and it didn't realize I meant elaborated on). ^^ Thank you for your feedback. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skuldur Posted April 23, 2009 Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 Holy sheet Sexy, that was epic. This is the most epic story I've read. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
∮.Ғσяgσттeи.SσℓÐιєя.∮ Posted April 23, 2009 Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 Great job with this chapter.ATTACK SXR. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fenrir Posted April 23, 2009 Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 I think I actually orgasmed just by reading this. inorite? It was amazing. THAT. This... Did I just Geass the Captain? Yes you did :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Encalade Shinamisu Posted April 23, 2009 Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 First things first, under the definition of zexism, should be epic, win, ycmanga, and fan fic king. I enjoyed this chapter the most, as it was lengthy for a fan fic, it was very detailed and portrayed characters as they should be. Some grammar errors can be understood, as it must have taken awhile to type. You have been around for awhile and hve gotten to understand the personas of most members here, especially with the organization. So, in honor of your win, cheers *raises SPARKLING CIDER* much better and hopes for more future wins... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luna Diviner Posted April 23, 2009 Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 Wow, win just epic win.Portray Characters they way they should be? I am not that evil. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Encalade Shinamisu Posted April 23, 2009 Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 But, you are twisted. Admit it! Look at your avi and your sig! only someone twisted would put gaara looking creepy with a cute anime chick with a sinister grin next to each other...XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luna Diviner Posted April 23, 2009 Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 Gaara, Anime Chick. Samething. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Encalade Shinamisu Posted April 23, 2009 Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 Agreed, but that just proves the twisted in you my twisted freind... Let's not get off topic here... What will Clari be able to do? That is another question just dying inside me... If she is leader [technically, org XIII is like roxas as king, important but... Clari is like queen, very powerful but not the official leader, and Zexy is like bishop, right besides the two. The org XIII higher ups are all like rooks and knights, and the heartless/nobodies, enough said...] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luna Diviner Posted April 23, 2009 Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 I still don't get why I am not a member of the Orginaztion, I may not be high up but I'm still in it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Encalade Shinamisu Posted April 23, 2009 Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 You're a member? Didn't even know... I think it might be because there wouldn't be enough enemies, making the ORG OP... It balances the scales a bit... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luna Diviner Posted April 23, 2009 Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 I've been a member for over a week. When is the next chapter going to be released? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larxene Posted April 23, 2009 Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 I'm pretty sure it's because you became a member right after he posted the first chapter. xD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Thar Posted April 23, 2009 Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 I'm pretty sure it's because you became a member right after he posted the first chapter. xD Oh, s***! Then I guess I should delete that emo post I man in XIII. Don't hate me for that! >.< Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted April 23, 2009 Report Share Posted April 23, 2009 Nice chapter, Although I had my suspicions on Roxas' part. I just wished I had another speaking part here, mostly because the only thing I ever said was something about the reward. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zexaeon Posted April 24, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 24, 2009 Worry not, Omega. Each of the assassins will get their turn in the Limelight. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted April 24, 2009 Report Share Posted April 24, 2009 A note on the first post should say where each chapter is. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zexaeon Posted April 24, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 24, 2009 There should be a link to Page 9 under the spoiler for Chapter 2. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted April 24, 2009 Report Share Posted April 24, 2009 I'd recommend for the link to bring the reader to the exact post. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
∮.Ғσяgσттeи.SσℓÐιєя.∮ Posted April 24, 2009 Report Share Posted April 24, 2009 The link doesn't bring me to any page in this thread other than the first.Fix the link. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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