fenrir Posted June 18, 2009 Report Share Posted June 18, 2009 Awesome chapter. Can't wait for the fight next chap =D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Icy Posted June 18, 2009 Report Share Posted June 18, 2009 *hugs Zexy Smexy like a little school girl* I LOVE IT! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Parting Shot Posted June 18, 2009 Report Share Posted June 18, 2009 Well, overall the chapter was just as awesome as the rest, but I have a few qualms about some character details (that is, if you're trying to make this realistic, if not then it's fine :P).... Still, can't wait for the next chapter and the epic fight between Bloody and Icy XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larxene Posted June 18, 2009 Report Share Posted June 18, 2009 That. Was. Awesome. =o Nex is a badass in this story. Also, in response to you text, Flandre murdered me. Dx I hate Laevatain. (Which I also can't spell.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Marly Posted June 18, 2009 Report Share Posted June 18, 2009 Definitely worth the wait, quite an impressive chapter. I loved Nex's bullets, very creative. Can't wait to see the battle, or the next chapter, for that matter. ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted June 18, 2009 Report Share Posted June 18, 2009 The moment you chose me as your opponent' date=' your fate was sealed.[/quote'] Doesn't Byakuya say this? This chapter was very much worth the wait. Raven/Opal's entire entrance scene was the best part, especially with the random explosion of her helmet. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Desu the Blue Nerd Posted June 19, 2009 Report Share Posted June 19, 2009 Loved it. Was worth the wait. Can't wait for the next chapter which will hopefully come out sooner. I got hyper while reading this chapter. I only get hyper when I'm really excited. I'm still jittering. It's times like this where I wish I was at my mom's so I could run around the house screaming, "SHO MY GOSH!!!!!!!!!" to try and burn off this energy. Now excuse me while I cry in the corner at the extreme loss of my self-esteem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zexaeon Posted June 19, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 19, 2009 @Cirno: Dx There are a LOT of characters in this fic. I can't include every last one of them every chapter. If it's any consolation, you, Lar, Rox, Sleeve, and Amethyst basically have the starring roles next chapter. Oh, and Icy and Blood. @Praisers: Hooray! xD Thank you all. @Rin: I will TRY. o.o I make no promises though, what with my even harsher limitation as far as compy availability goes. @Darth: This is supposed to take real aspects of the members I'm basing the characters on, while combining them with more fictional elements for the sake of the fic. But, be that as it may, if you have ANY suggestions for proper characterization, I will gladly accept them. >.> Unlike a certain unnamed someone who refuses to change his characters when they are clearly wrong. @Rox: It's an epic line, no? xD I had fun writing Raven's aprt. Speaking of, if any of you see her, tell her to come and read this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted June 19, 2009 Report Share Posted June 19, 2009 @Cirno: Dx There are a LOT of characters in this fic. I can't include every last one of them every chapter. If it's any consolation' date=' you, Lar, [b']Rox[/b], Sleeve, and Amethyst basically have the starring roles next chapter. Oh, and Icy and Blood. I'm happy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nexev Posted June 19, 2009 Report Share Posted June 19, 2009 XD IT'S FINALLY HERE. After busting through my writer's block with a Hammer of Violence' date=' and finding a computer that I might temporarily use, here it is! And there it is. I can haz Sticky now?[/quote'] I thoguht you said I broke the writers block. Oh well. This may prove troublesome for my prologue as in it the Xirno law of physics is applied (the law states whenever any words regarding or indicating a affair/crush of Clair that does not have Xirno said Xirno will then proceed to attack the person regardless of the distance between Xirno and the offender). Plus Sleeve was gonna have god powers but the innocence and randomness to be unable to use them effectively. That will only set me back a small amount since I can't make any part of the fic because YOU won't tell me the powers. [/pout] Definitely worth the wait' date=' quite an impressive chapter. I loved Nex's bullets, very creative. Can't wait to see the battle, or the next chapter, for that matter. ^^[/quote'] I came up with the bullets myself. It's called the Individually Customized Explosive bullet system (or the ICE bullet system). The gun is a 273.15K Frohawk (273.15 Kelvin is waters freezing point). He may change the name though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted June 19, 2009 Report Share Posted June 19, 2009 @Cirno: Dx There are a LOT of characters in this fic. I can't include every last one of them every chapter. If it's any consolation' date=' you, Lar, [b']Rox[/b], Sleeve, and Amethyst basically have the starring roles next chapter. Oh, and Icy and Blood. I'm happy. I'm not. No jelleh? D: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zexaeon Posted June 19, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 19, 2009 @Nex: You ARE the Hammer of Violence. =o And pardon me for not wanting to divulge my secrets. xD @Rin: You and Forneus and Valefor will have your moments in the sun, rest assured. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted June 19, 2009 Report Share Posted June 19, 2009 You and Forneus and Valefor will have your moments in the sun' date=' rest assured.[/quote'] Good. Because I still don't have a clue on what my character looks like. [cough]EDITTHATCHAPTERPLEASE![/cough] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zexaeon Posted June 19, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 19, 2009 xD Why don't I just add a separate descriptive section for all the characters, like I added the ability glossary? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larxene Posted June 19, 2009 Report Share Posted June 19, 2009 I really don't know what I look like either. xD All I know was that I wore black and had blonde hair similar to Larxene's. And something to do with Flandre. I kinda pictured myself in this wearing all black (not really a cloak, just all black.) with hair like Flandre's Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aelsthla-Mental Posted June 19, 2009 Report Share Posted June 19, 2009 ...Interesting chapter name XD. And great idea Nexev with the ICE bullets. Don't change the name though, it's perfect! And... Yeah, a character appearance section would be nice I think. Anyway, well worth the wait, keep it up! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zexaeon Posted June 19, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 19, 2009 =P That's pretty much how you look, yeah. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted June 19, 2009 Report Share Posted June 19, 2009 xD Why don't I just add a separate descriptive section for all the characters' date=' like I added the ability glossary?[/quote'] Yes plz. :3 For some reason, I keep on imagining myself as a turn-of-the-century newsboy. :/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skuldur Posted June 19, 2009 Report Share Posted June 19, 2009 =O I smell some RikuxRaven shipping going on. >_> Can't wait for the next chapter. =D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nexev Posted June 20, 2009 Report Share Posted June 20, 2009 Aeon mentioned you do the same thing to Clair so it's more like Raven is very flirty. Espically since she also acted the same way to Aeon. (I can see why I won't like, World Domination is Serious Business) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Plaguespreader Zombie Posted June 20, 2009 Report Share Posted June 20, 2009 XD IT'S FINALLY HERE. After busting through my writer's block with a Hammer of Violence' date=' and finding a computer that I might temporarily use, here it is! And there it is. I can haz Sticky now?[/quote'] I thoguht you said I broke the writers block. Oh well. This may prove troublesome for my prologue as in it the Xirno law of physics is applied (the law states whenever any words regarding or indicating a affair/crush of Clair that does not have Xirno said Xirno will then proceed to attack the person regardless of the distance between Xirno and the offender). Affair? Is there something you know that I don't? >> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nexev Posted June 20, 2009 Report Share Posted June 20, 2009 Excerpt from Fic:"Master~!" she called happily as she leaped into his awaiting arms, snuggling into him as he patted her head and whispered sweet nothings into her ear. Riku stood in the doorway, looking away politely. "Do you two always have to be like that?" "Like you're not the same way with Claire." Roxas announced as he arrived on the scene. "Raven, good to have you back." he said, directing his attention toward her. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Plaguespreader Zombie Posted June 20, 2009 Report Share Posted June 20, 2009 I think he meant; he's obsessed with Claire. Not hinting a love >> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skuldur Posted June 20, 2009 Report Share Posted June 20, 2009 I'm the Second in Command in the Yellow Squad! I can do whatever I like. >=) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Davok Posted June 20, 2009 Report Share Posted June 20, 2009 Awesome chapter. ;D Still, next one I demand more Davok-included scenes. Kay? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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