The Ghost Chronicles[PG-16][Chronicle 2: Jacks London][Chapter 4 Up]

[Soul Legacy]

XD stop it, your embarassing me!, lol, jokez

[ragnarok1945]

It's just facts, you know.

 

You going to deny that too now?

[Soul Legacy]

no, not atall :)

[ragnarok1945]

That's good to hear then.

 

When you have the next chap ready, let us know

[Soul Legacy]

Ok, im writing Chapter 14 now, but its going to take awhile because im doing other things aswell.......

[Chaotic Angel]

Okay. I'll wait. Although it'll take a while..

[Soul Legacy]

not too long, i'll be finished with my first peices of work in half an hour ;)

[ragnarok1945]

Which basically should suggest the rest of the chap up before the day is over

[Soul Legacy]

Excactly :D

[ragnarok1945]

Then hopefully you'll live up to the promise

[Soul Legacy]

I promise, i will ;)

[ragnarok1945]

don't worry

 

No one is going to put you into the meat grinder if you don't :)

[Soul Legacy]

Thanks, i don't like dissapointing you guys.....

[ragnarok1945]

I know what you mean, but you DID say you had other things to tend to........

[Soul Legacy]

Yeah, so i think im going to split chapter 14 in two parts, if you don't mind......

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Sorry its short:

 

[spoiler=Chapter 14: On The Run]

 

Fiarce backed towards Alex and Stephine and asked quietly, “ok, what’s going on?” but before Alex had a chance to speak the commander stepped forward and said “your in this position because you are in contact with a ghost….” Fiarce laughed and said, “yes, but that ghost is Miss Agas Constentine” the receptionist then said, “yes, but she was a secret from the government, and now they have found her out, they want to get rid of her” Alex laughed and muttered, “someone’s trying to do that already…….”

 

The guys where marched out of the inn and into a van, they were thrown and locked in. Fiarce hit the steel door and said, “Damn it!” Stephine stood up and walked over to him, “don’t worry, we’ll get out…….” Fiarce then looked back at her and said, “what, when Agas gets killed and trapped forever?!” Stephine then backed away and said, “Okay, okay……” she then sat back down. Fiarce sighed and sat down as well.

 

As the van started to move, Fiarce kept on re-thinking the moment that he was about to kiss Agas over and over again, he then thought of what was going to happen to him and the guys, he then stood back up and walked to the door and kicked it, he then saw that it stuttered. He kicked it again and it stuttered again, he then gave it one fierce kick and it fell off.

 

Fiarce, instead of telling the guys to come along, straight away jumped out and began to run, the guys noticed and followed, the van drivers then realised and stopped, they got out and began to shoot at the guys. They ran, ran as fast as they could, Fiarce thought he was going faster then Usain Bolt at one point. After they got out of range of fire, they climbed up a ladder on a side of a building.

 

As they got to the top, they layed down so they could get out of view of the drivers. Once they left, they got back up and took deep breaths, Alex then was the first one to speak, “now what?” Fiarce shrugged, “I don’t know, we now have the government after us, we aren’t safe enough to just walk around anymore……” He then went to the ladder again and then climbed down it again.

 

 

[Fallen Hero]

i'll wait for the second half before i make a comment about chapter 14

[ragnarok1945]

impressive action, but I want to see how it ends first

[Chaotic Angel]

Agreed. Well, yeah.. It's quite short.. Maybe you could separate the chapter in 2 parts if you want.

[ragnarok1945]

Personally I feel you should have kept it in one chap.

 

Part 1 didn't exactly end in a cliffhanger you know

[Soul Legacy]

I know, im sorry, i was running low on time, and you know how that feels...

[ragnarok1945]

Obviously, though if I was in that situation, I would have used the "double or nothing" approach, and asked the readers to wait a little longer

[Soul Legacy]

Thats what im going have to do with chapter 15, it will be up tommorow :)

[ragnarok1945]

That's good to hear, just don't rush yourself

[Soul Legacy]

Ok, im working on chapter 15 now :D

[Fallen Hero]

erm... what happened to 14 part 2?