~Emo~ Posted April 1, 2009 Report Share Posted April 1, 2009 [align=center][spoiler=Breeds] [spoiler=werewolves]Also known as lycans, werewolves have evolved over the years. Being created by Fredrick, the first true werewolf has gained the power to transform out side of the full moon, but only at night. They are still able to use there talons and great strength and have no weakness to silver what so ever. Also, werewolves can regenerate almost immediately after being hurt. They also have the abbility to grow there limbs back. They cannot freely bite and turn anybody they please like vampires, they can only bite humans with the blood type +0.r (they look Almost exactly like the lycans in underworld except there snouts are longer, they are stronger, there fur is gray with the exception of Fredrick's black fur, and they regenerate much faster) [spoiler=Vampires]Vampires look like typical goths. They drink blood and are easily burned to death by the sun. They have large fangs and usually stay in there leader, Lorenzo, underground mansion. vampires can jump extremly high, can regenerate, and have strength some what stronger than a human. They can turn anyone they please] [spoiler=The Story] In the early 1800's there was a young man named, Christopher O'Keeffe who bored a son, Lorenzo. But Christopher was cursed by the gods to be immortal to watch everyone he loved. But one of the gods felt pity, so he gave Lorenzo, Christopher's son, Immortality. But when the strongest of the gods found out, he turned baby Lorenzo into the first true Vampire. 3 years latter Christopher learned what Lorenzo had become a vampire and tried to have another child, they named him Fredrick. The kind god did what he did to Lorenzo, made him immortal. the strongest god anticipated he would try this again so he cursed the mother. When Fredrick was born, he was not human, but the first true Lycanthrope. Over 200 years latter, Lorenzo created a collar for his little broth making him unable to transform when he was 4 years old. So this made it perfect when they moved to New York. Lorenzo paid Scientists to find humans with +0 blood so he could inject them with his brothers blood, making them his slaves. Lorenzo having turned goth, bit over 200 gothic males and females. He had a mansion built underground to protect them from the sun. Fredrick and his followers all had collars to keep them from transforming during the night. They worked for the Vampires as there slaves until Fredrick was smacked in the face by his brother for "Touching" a female vampire. Fredrick started thrashing about until 1 of the vampire guards shot his neck with a hand gun. Unaware of Fredrick's Regenerative abilities, the collar came off and Fredrick escaped, but not before taking his followers with him. [spoiler=Submit a Character]Name:Age:Werewolf Or Vampire?:BirthdateWhen Bitten?:Bio:Appearance: [spoiler=Characters]Name: Fredrick Age: over 200 years old. Body looks 15.Werewolf Or Vampire?: WerewolfBirthdate: February 9, 1810When Bitten?: He was never bitten, he is the first true LycanBio: See Plot.Appearance: Name: LorenzoAge: over 200. Body looks 18.Werewolf Or Vampire?: VampireBirthdate: March 16, 1807When Bitten?: He was never Bitten, he is the first true Vampire.Bio: See plot.Appearance: [spoiler=Chapter 1] New York city..... 7:25 AM..... T.V.: (Static) Today's skies will be partially cloudy with a 38% chance of...BEEP. Stephanie: *Yawn* Looks like I won't be going out today. Stephanie gets out of bed and walks out of her room into the common room with 10 other vampires in it. Vampire #1: Did you here? Vampire #2: Here what? Vampire #1: About the escape. Vampire #2: Oh yeah, Lorenzo really screwed up this time. Both vampires start laughing at a loud volume. Stephanie walks over to them with a puzzled look on her face. Stephanie: what are you two talking about? Vampire #1: The escape last night. Vampire #2: Didn't ya here? Stephanie: No, who escaped!?! Tell me NOW! Vampire #1: I doubt it is much of a problem but, Fredrick, Lorenzo's little brother, escaped last night. Stephanie: Thats terrible, we have to do something! Vampire #1: calm down. Lorenzo will bring his brother back as soon as night falls. Stephanie: I hope you are right, I really do. Embassy Sweets Hotel, NYC...... 3: 13 PM.... Fredrick: We are free now my friends! We no longer stay under the weight of my brother and his foolish coven. Slater: Yes my lord, but our freedom may not last for to long. As you know only five of use made it out the rest are still there. Fredrick: I know that, and I know my brother will come looking for me as soon as night falls. Lycan #1: So we must move quickly I presume? Fredrick: exactly. Slater: So then why are we sitting in a hotel with a bunch of mortals? Fredrick: You are absolutely right! Slater, Marcel, Ripley, Bleach, call for a taxi, we are getting out of here. All Lycans: Right! The Coven.... 7:10 PM..... Stephanie: Were is Lorenzo? Guard: He and mis Portman are discussing in some "Intimate" matters. Stephanie: The sun has gone down, we must look for Fredrick immediately! Guard: Lord Lorenzo will look for his foolish brother soon enough. The pose not threat with those collars on. Stephanie storms away into the armory where her good friend, Hudson, was located. Stephanie: Hudson! Hudson: (Holding a 12 gauge shotgun) Oh, hello Stephanie. Stephanie: Round up your men, were are going to look for Fredrick. Hudson: You know that is against the law of the vampires, Lorenzo made it clear that if any harm fell upon Fredrick, the persons who are responsible must pay with there life. That is why, Dagger, was executed this morning. Stephanie: We are not going to kill him, just bring him back. Hudson: I dunno... Stephanie: lease? Hudson: O.k. I'll round up my 6 best men and we will head out in one hour. [spoiler=Chapter 2]Northern Sky Apartment complex..... 8:32 PM...... Hudson and Stephanie along with 6 others drive into the complex in a black van. Stephanie: (Holding a 30 caliber hunting rifle.) There are not to many people here. Hudson: Thats what scares me. The van stops at the back half of the complex were they will be least likely noticed. Hudson: Alright men you orders are as followed, capture and contain all Lycanthropes, silence and witnesses and capture and contain Fredrick, but he must not be harmed. Drake: Why do we need guns if they cannot transform? Hudson: Safety reasons. Stephanie: lets get moving. All the vampires jump out of the Van armed with Hunting Rifles, Shotguns, and Uzi's. With Revolvers for back up. Apartment number 109..... 8:52 PM..... Fredrick: Slater, have our "guests" arrived yet? Slater: Yes they have. Fredrick: well, we have no worries. As long as they do not know that we have removed our collars. Ripley: What is our plan? Fredrick: It would be rude to keep our guests waiting. Would it not? Apartment Complex left wing.... Hudson: Be careful everyone. Remember, Fredrick must not be harmed. Apone: Did you guys hear that? Stephanie: (Scared) H..h..hear what? Apone: You guys acting like chickens! HAHAHA! Hudson: Shut up Apone. Stephanie: Don't scare us like that. Apone: Oh don't be such a... Just as Apone was about to finish his sentence Ripley crawled out of the room and grabbed him from behind. Apone: What the hel!?! Hudson: FIRE! Stephanie fired 4 rounds into Ripley but he was not about to give up. Ripley (Still in human form) Grabbed Stephanie by the neck and threw her. Stephanie hit the wall but quickly recovered and grabbed Ripley by the arm and bashed him into the floor. She then flipped him over and fired all 6 bullets from her revolver into his heart, killing him. Apone: Thanks, Stephanie. Stephanie: Who's the chicken now? Fredrick appeared at the other end of the hall, as well as the other 3 lycans. Fredrick: Ripley! Hudson: Don't shoot him. Fredrick rushed at Hudson quickly and knocked him down. Even though Hudson was skilled in hand to hand combat, he was no match for Fredrick. Hudson knocked Fredrick away with all his strength. But Fredrick grabbed Hudson again and shoved his fist threw his stomach and out his back, killing him. Stephanie: No, Hudson. Drake: Kill them all! Every one starts to fire except Stephanie, who runs and hides in a dark corner in wing. She laid there and heard her teammates firing all there rounds at them. She looked and could see there shadows as Fredrick and his Lycan brood kill all of her friends. Fredrick: My brother underestimated me again. This was a mistake on his part. Fredrick looks down and notices a paper attached to Hudson's jacket. Fredrick: Whats this? The paper had contained every mortal in New York City with + 0 blood. Fredrick: Hehehe. Soon brother, soon I will have me revenge! [spoiler=Chapter 3] Vampire Coven.... 10:39 PM..... Stephanie arrives back at the mansion after barley escaping Fredrick and his men. She opens to entrance door and walk past two armed guards. One of them look at her but she does not look back. She walks past some fellow vampires and heads for Lorenzo's quarters. Stephanie: Lorenzo! The door swings open and Lorenzo appears with and angered look on his face. All the vampires, including Stephanie, bow before him. Lorenzo: What is it my child? Stephanie: Fredrick killed Hudson and his men. There is a long moment of silence in which Stephanie started to worry. Lorenzo: You disobeyed my orders and left to hunt for my brother? Resulting in the deaths of some of my best men! Stephanie: Fredrick did not have to transform to kill them.! Lorenzo: I know! As much as it pains me to admit it but, Fredrick is stronger than everyone in this coven and possibly the world. Stephanie: But you my lord, can you not kill him. Lorenzo: Of course i can! Those wrenched beasts are no match for my strength! Outside of the Coven.... 10:53 PM...... A taxi arrives at the entrance to the underground coven. The doors of the taxi fly open as Fredrick and his men pile out. Fredrick: We no longer bear our wretched collars. We are free to turn at will! Slater: Sir, what did we come back here for? Fredrick: Why to free our brethren. Bleach: But how will we get in? Fredrick: I have seen the code they use many times, I'll be sure to get us in. The four lycans walked to they gate and opened it using the code: 22-1-13-16-9-18-5. They rushed in unseen and pulled there jackets over them so they would not be found. As they walked in vampires stared at them curiously. Stephanie: Who are they. Lorenzo: BROTHER!!! Fredrick: AW, DAMN! Fredrick spun around and pilled out a 9mm pistol and shot and killed 3 vampires. Fredrick: Go, go, go, go! The other three lycans ran away towards the imprisoned lycans. A vampire guard shot Fredrick with there Rifle but that did not even effect him as Fredrick fired three bullets into his head. A second vampire ran at him with a sword and slashed at him. Fredrick's hand grew long black claws as he slashed the vampires face. Lorenzo: Stop them now! Fredrick turned and fired his last bullets into Lorenzo's chest. But Lorenzo quickly regenerated and grabbed a fallen vampire's sword. But by this time Fredrick was already on his way to find the other Lycans. Fredrick: Bleach, were are you? Bleach: over her. Fredrick ran towards bleach and into the other lycans sell room. Fredrick: Brothers, I am here to free you from these wretched creatures! Fredrick went to every sell and ripped the bars off each one without breaking a sweat. By the time he was done, he had freed 47 Lycans. Fredrick: Run you fools, out the back, this way! Lorenzo finally managed to catch up to his brother but was stopped by Bleach. Bleach: (Shaking) Grrrrr... ARGHHH!!! AHHH! Bleach started to turn into a lycan. Bleach's claws and fangs started to grow as he turned fully into a lycan. Bleach: ROAR!!!! Lorenzo: Hissss! Bleach rushed at Lorenzo but was unaware the Lorenzo had something that the others did not, he had wings. Lorenzo's wings sprouted out of his back and stabbed Bleach in the heart, killing him. After Lorenzo ran into the now empty cell chamber and looked out the window and saw they were escaping. Fredrick: Run! Run brothers! It is this way to freedom! [spoiler=Chapter 4] The Next Day.... 8:33 PM..... New York Fair Grounds.... Stephanie: I can't believe those monsters are running about the city. Jazz: (Her bf since 1893) Come on, we came here to have fun. Stephanie: How can I have fun knowing very well that those monsters are out there? Jazz: You brought your revolver didn't you? Stephanie: Yes, but.. Jazz: (Takes her hand) Then were safe. Stephanie and Jazz embrace in a long passionate kiss. New York Fair Grounds coaster Area.... 8:49 PM..... Fredrick paces back and forth. Fredrick: Do I really want to ride this thing? I hate heights. Slater: Just get on the ride, my lord. I will be fun. Fredrick: I dunno. Fredrick and Slater start to continue to talk as Stephanie and Jazz come there way. Bleach: (Turns around.) PALE SKINS! Fredrick spins around and pulls out two UZI 9mms and proceeded to kill them both. Fredrick: DIE! Bullets flew there way as Stephanie and Jazz turn. Jazz: (Pulls out small sword) Son of a @!%*& ! Stephanie: WEREWOLVES! Stephanie pulls out her revolver and fires at Fredrick. The bullet hits him right in the chest. Fredrick: Hehehe.. The bullets fall out of his chest and his wounds closed. Jazz: He healed almost 2 seconds later!?! Slater jumps Jazz and bites his neck. Jazz: DAMN! Jazz swung his sword and cut his chest. Slater pulled his shirt off. Slater: Grrr. Slater's snout grew and his nails until he was fully transformed. Slater smacked Jazz into the ticket booth. The crowed of people started to run and scream. Jazz: I am gonna kill you! Jazz lashed at Slater but he just got knocked away. Slater: ROAR! Slater grabbed Jazz and proceeded to bite his head off. Stephanie: No! Stephanie started to fire at Slater's head. Fredrick: Good work Slater. Slater jumped back and Fredrick fired his Uzi rounds into Jazz's legs and shoulder. Slater: ROAR! Slater charged Stephanie and scratched her face. Stephanie: (With blood dripping down her face.) Eat this! She put her Revolver into his mouth and fired. Slater smacked the gun away. Jazz: (Dying) *Throws sword at Slater's leg* DIE! Slater: ROAR! Fredrick: Enough! Fredrick's wrist blades come out and he puts them to Jazz's neck. Fredrick: Time to die! Stephanie: NO! [spoiler= Chapter 5] New York Fair Grounds..... 9:30 PM..... Stephanie grabbed a steel pipe from a near by attraction and lodged it into Fredricks back. Fredrick: B****! Fredrick shoved his blades into her stomach. Stephanie: (Spits out blood) Ugggg..... Fredrick: Now die quietly. Jazz: NO! Jazz grabs Fredrick's leg and bites it. Fredrick: Damn you! Fredrick kicks Jazz in the face. Slater runs up and grabs Jazz by the neck. Fredrick: No were to run? Stephanie: You animal. Fredrick: Shut up! Fredrick slaps Stephanie with his claws. Fredrick: Never call me that! Suddenly fire crackers are heard as Fredrick turns to see three gothic males and one female. Boy # 1: (Notices what is going on.) Oh ****! Fredrick: Slater, kill them now! Slater grabs two of the boys. Slater: ROAR! Girl: Stop please! The other boy tries to run but is shot by Fredrick. Boy # 4:Damn... Girl: NO! Please stop! The girl grabs Fredrick's legs and pleads. Fredrick: You have seen what we are and that in unacceptable. Fredrick raises 9mm pistol to her head. Girl: Please. Jazz grabs his revolver and slowly gets up. Jazz: Go back to hell! Jazz shoots Fredrick in the back. Fredrick: *grunts* Slater quickly rips the two boys to shreds, leaving a bloody mess and run at Jazz. Slater: ROAR! Slater grabs Jazz and holds him tight. Jazz then puts his gun in Slater's mouth and is about to fire when he is stabbed in the back by Fredrick's wrist blades. Stephanie: (Regenerated) Jazz! Jazz: Stephanie, I'll always love you. Jazz dies on the ground and Stephanie runs away. Slater: ROAR! Fredrick: let her go. She has suffered enough. Besides, if we continue to do such things, we will be no better then my brother and his kind. Slater returns to his human form. Slater: Yes, my lord. Fredrick notices the girl whimpering on the floor. Fredrick: (Goes to the girl.) I am sorry for what I have done. Girl: What are you? Fredrick: Werewolves. Girl: And they were....? Fredrick: Vampires. My name is Fredrick. I am the first and strongest werewolf. Girl: I am Cassandra. Fredrick: That is a beautiful name. Cassandra: Thank you. Fredrick: What is your blood type? Cassandra: +0. Fredrick: Do you want to become immortal and strong? Cassandra: Yes but how. Fredrick's teeth grew and he bit Cassandra. Fredrick: I am sorry. Cassandra: AHHH! Fredrick: You are now a werewolf. Cassandra: Your not evil, are you? Fredrick: No. If you doubted that why are you so calm? Cassandra: Because you seem sweet. Fredrick leans in and kisses Cassandra who willingly kisses him on the lips.The two indulge in a long kiss as Slater goes to get the card. [/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kendo Fish Posted April 1, 2009 Report Share Posted April 1, 2009 I don't quite understand it yet, mostly because in this first chapter there's only a history, not really part of the story. Also, there are some weird misspellings you accidentally put in, like broth instead of brother. the way you worded it, it also sounds like Lorenzo is an underground mansion. Make sure you read over your story so that you can make sure it makes sense. I'd like to look at the next chapter to get a better look at this, though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Emo~ Posted April 1, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 1, 2009 thnx, i will try. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted April 2, 2009 Report Share Posted April 2, 2009 That worked fine as a Prolouge! I like this! If you want my Expert Char Suggestion Powers, I'd love to suggest one! Feel free to PM me a Character Form, or post ot here! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Emo~ Posted April 2, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 2, 2009 alright Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fenrir Posted April 2, 2009 Report Share Posted April 2, 2009 Yea. Uh, interesting? I guess? I swear I've heard this before... >,< Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Emo~ Posted April 2, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 2, 2009 Umm thanx? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fenrir Posted April 2, 2009 Report Share Posted April 2, 2009 On another note, if you need a Hybrid char, give me a pm. I'm good with that. Berserker = Win Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Emo~ Posted April 3, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 3, 2009 I sort of wanted to stay away from hybrids but I might use one latter on. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fenrir Posted April 3, 2009 Report Share Posted April 3, 2009 Like said, when you need one, pm. And Dracopyres... *Cough cough* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted April 3, 2009 Report Share Posted April 3, 2009 Draco...pyres? I would suggest a char if you...PM me a form... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Emo~ Posted April 3, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 3, 2009 if you wanna send a character, Here is the forum:Name:Age:Werewolf Or Vampire?:BirthdateWhen Bitten?:Bio:Appearance: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Emo~ Posted April 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 4, 2009 bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted April 4, 2009 Report Share Posted April 4, 2009 Nice chapter! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Emo~ Posted April 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 4, 2009 Thnx, I used your character as a main. ;D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted April 4, 2009 Report Share Posted April 4, 2009 Thanks, mate! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Emo~ Posted April 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 4, 2009 I need more characters. Can any body help me make more? The forum is on the first post. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted April 4, 2009 Report Share Posted April 4, 2009 Well, I'm kinda tired, but I can make maybe two for ya tomorrow!;D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Emo~ Posted April 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 4, 2009 o.k. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted April 4, 2009 Report Share Posted April 4, 2009 Looks nice, already! Name:Alex SparksAge:19Werewolf Or Vampire?:WerewolfBirthdate: May 25, 1990When Bitten?:May 25, 2000 (Yes at the day of his birth)Bio:Alex appeares to keep quiet about him being a werewolf, since he was bitten at the age of 10, he's quite powerful with his Form. Shocked about this, 10-yr year old Alex started to just go along with it, training himself and soon grew up to be a man who works for himself.Appearance: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Emo~ Posted April 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 4, 2009 Looks nice' date=' already! Name:Alex SparksAge:19Werewolf Or Vampire?:WerewolfBirthdate: May 25, 1990When Bitten?:May 25, 2000 (Yes at the day of his birth)Bio:Alex appeares to keep quiet about him being a werewolf, since he was bitten at the age of 10, he's quite powerful with his Form. Shocked about this, 1-yr year old Alex started to just go along with it, training himself and soon grew up to be a man who works for himself.Appearance:[img']http://i217.photobucket.com/albums/cc52/AkanetheAngel/anime_guy.jpg[/img] Make him older. Most of the characters i need are over 200 years old. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted April 4, 2009 Report Share Posted April 4, 2009 Wait...He's bitten, When a vampire or Werewolf bites you, you don't get immortallity.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Emo~ Posted April 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 4, 2009 yes you do. And why would Lorenzo give a 10 year old Fredrick's blood? He wanted slaves not puppies. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted April 4, 2009 Report Share Posted April 4, 2009 Wait...what the heck?! You actually don't receive immortallity once bitten, also....The younger they are, the more experience they learn with. If you read the bio, he's not a slave for Lorenzo! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Emo~ Posted April 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted April 4, 2009 yes they do become immortal. Lorenzo does not care about experience. He just wants people to do his dirty work. And he has to be a slave because it has to go with the story. Only 5 escaped currently and i have already shown those characters. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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