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The Union of Justice! Book 1: The Rise Of Daemonus. [EPILOGUE UP!]


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Should I make a Sequel?  

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  1. 1. Should I make a Sequel?

    • HELL YEAH!
    • Meh, maybe...
    • NO! NO!! I'M GONNA COMMIT SUICIDE!!!


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Okay... That was odd....

 

Sad thing is your going to make Renamon a twisted evil sub conscious (since she is not human I can't say subhuman) being. And you know what your gonna do later, your gonna remove the curse mark, Renamon will be a goody two shoes, she will say sorry and everyone will instantly forgive her. Because that's what you do, you won't go all the way.

 

If it was my fan fic I would have gotten Orochimaru and Warrior of light killed by a supervillian to display his huge power. Then Renamon will become said villians thrall, then she is killed by Rika. That way people know your not gonna be soft, they die and they become evil, but they won't go back.

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Okay... That was odd....

 

Sad thing is your going to make Renamon a twisted evil sub conscious (since she is not human I can't say subhuman) being. And you know what your gonna do later' date=' your gonna remove the curse mark, Renamon will be a goody two shoes, she will say sorry and everyone will instantly forgive her. Because that's what you do, you won't go all the way.

 

[b']If it was my fan fic I would have gotten Orochimaru and Warrior of light killed by a supervillian to display his huge power. Then Renamon will become said villians thrall, then she is killed by Rika. That way people know your not gonna be soft, they die and they become evil, but they won't go back.[/b]

 

That sounds like what I was going to do O.o

 

DAMN YOU.

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Okay... That was odd....

 

Sad thing is your going to make Renamon a twisted evil sub conscious (since she is not human I can't say subhuman) being. And you know what your gonna do later' date=' your gonna remove the curse mark, Renamon will be a goody two shoes, she will say sorry and everyone will instantly forgive her. Because that's what you do, you won't go all the way.

 

If it was my fan fic I would have gotten Orochimaru and Warrior of light killed by a supervillian to display his huge power. Then Renamon will become said villians thrall, then she is killed by Rika. That way people know your not gonna be soft, they die and they become evil, but they won't go back.

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Frohawk if your gonna complain about how someone does a fan fic, DO YOUR OWN GOD DAMN FAN FIC THEN.

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Okay... That was odd....

 

Sad thing is your going to make Renamon a twisted evil sub conscious (since she is not human I can't say subhuman) being. And you know what your gonna do later' date=' [b']your gonna remove the curse mark[/b], Renamon will be a goody two shoes, she will say sorry and everyone will instantly forgive her. Because that's what you do, you won't go all the way.

 

If it was my fan fic I would have gotten Orochimaru and Warrior of light killed by a supervillian to display his huge power. Then Renamon will become said villians thrall, then she is killed by Rika. That way people know your not gonna be soft, they die and they become evil, but they won't go back.

 

1: WHO SAID ANYTHING ABOUT ME REMOVING HER CURSE MARK, SMART FACE?!

 

2: Well, maybe not EVERYONE will forgive her!!!

 

3: IF YOU GOT SO MANY FRICKIN' GOOD IDEAS, WHY DON'T YOU USE THEM IN YOUR OWN FAN FIC, AND STOP WASTING YOUR TIME READING THIS?!?!

 

Sorry, I'm just in a very foul mood since my Internet is f*cked up...

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I'm not, it's just that I start noticing a pattern and I am pointing out something similar, if it looks like you are following a road their is nothing more shocking than a sudden turn.

 

Metaphor aside, I am noticing a pattern somewhat, by doing something completely unexpected but not outright ridiculous then you completely shake up the story making it more interesting than many can normally accomplish.

 

Plus I am making a fan fic, I am getting the premises written up.

 

Finally the sole reason I am complaining is that if you complain someone improves the work so that you shut up, if you compliment they don't see anything wrong and don't improve the work. AKA I am complaining because criticism improves better than compliments.

 

It's still a good fanfic.

 

Also I am clearly not good with dealing with people.

 

Last but not least the Curse mark is removed once Orochimaru dies, keep that in mind (He must die since leaving a super powered supervillian alive is not your style)

Also the reason I am certain she will be forgiven is that since Shadow was let out of his cell in your other fanfic and not instantly locked up again even though he more or less destroyed Mobius and tried to kill them means that Renamon will be forgiven for a small thing like trying to kill them.

 

Aww, I got negged, now my feelings are hurt...

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You are a good writer, you just seem to like to do things this one way.

 

It's similar to how you always know that Yugi cannot lose a card game. This makes it all the more amazing in the 1 time he actually loses (I think it was against Raphael). Though I guess you should just do things your way since I don't even know if my idea would work.

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Fine now we can all forget about that...

 

Hey Kudaj, maybe you should give the hero Choccobo's to use as steeds, I don't see many forms of transportation so they must be tired when they travel, also you did not mention Harry's skill with his Firebolt, maybe it would be wise for him to use it during his fight.

 

Finally Fenir, please remove Omega's neg if you would be so kind.

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