Ezio Posted March 17, 2009 Report Share Posted March 17, 2009 [align=center]Oooh Cool!*Goes off to read Chapter 5*[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lelouch Lamperouge Posted March 17, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 17, 2009 Did You Like It? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezio Posted March 17, 2009 Report Share Posted March 17, 2009 [align=center]Yes!It was very good!I liked the Sandshrew bit,but you kind of beat Poseidon quickly!Oh whatever that's me just nitpicking coz I submitted him!Nice Chapter![/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lelouch Lamperouge Posted March 17, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 17, 2009 Thanks :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fallen Hero Posted March 18, 2009 Report Share Posted March 18, 2009 nice chapter but you didn't take my advice with making the battles tougher for cubone, you're still making it sound too easy for him. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shiko11 Posted March 18, 2009 Report Share Posted March 18, 2009 Fallen, you always beat me to it, don't you? :P anyway...Time to rate! (ratings may vary between chapters) Grammar: 1.5/3Battle:1.8/4storyline 2.2/3Overall:4.5/10 PS- take Fallen's advice. It will boost the pokemon battle score and a little storyline. Grammar chack your work. This all is advice from a NooB. so don't take it too seriously. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fallen Hero Posted March 18, 2009 Report Share Posted March 18, 2009 Fallen' date=' you always beat me to it, don't you? :P anyway...Time to rate! (ratings may vary between chapters) Grammar: 1.5/3Battle:1.8/4storyline 2.2/3Overall:4.5/10 PS- take Fallen's advice. It will boost the pokemon battle score and a little storyline. Grammar [b']chack[/b] your work. This all is advice from a NooB. so don't take it too seriously. what can i say "early bird gets the worm" i guessalso what i put in bold i hope that was just a joke cos you should be careful as well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shiko11 Posted March 18, 2009 Report Share Posted March 18, 2009 LOL i feel embarresed. Well, that's irony for you. :) -AGAIN, have a nice day! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fallen Hero Posted March 18, 2009 Report Share Posted March 18, 2009 and so you should feel embarrassed, anyways cove you better take my advice. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shiko11 Posted March 18, 2009 Report Share Posted March 18, 2009 yes i should. Are we going to talk in every fanfic today? :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezio Posted March 19, 2009 Report Share Posted March 19, 2009 [align=center]Can't wait for the next Chapter ;)[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lelouch Lamperouge Posted March 19, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 19, 2009 Well Your Gonna Have To! {Sarcasm}:lol: LolNext Chapter Will Be Up 2Day Or 2Morrow (Not Sure) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fallen Hero Posted March 19, 2009 Report Share Posted March 19, 2009 Cove you didn't take my advice from before Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fenrir Posted March 19, 2009 Report Share Posted March 19, 2009 Oh noez. Bad fic is bad. Un-original, use of smileys is annoying and doesn't help at all. It really just looks like you just typed teh script of the fic, not the story. I suggest you double check your grammar, stop using smileys, actually describe what's happening, and throw in some plot twisters. Sorry if I came off as harsh just being honest with ya. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lelouch Lamperouge Posted March 19, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 19, 2009 Thanks To All For Comments Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shiko11 Posted March 20, 2009 Report Share Posted March 20, 2009 your welcome. And dude, take this nicely(includes flaming)[spoiler=]Dude. I think we'd all appreciate it if you'd START TAKING THE ADVICE!The smileys are ANOYING and POINTLESS. CHECK YOUR GRAMMAR!!! ... whew, sorry. I just have to let it out every once in a little while. Anyway, pleaae do as above.-have a nice day. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lelouch Lamperouge Posted March 20, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 20, 2009 your welcome. And dude' date=' take this nicely(includes flaming)[spoiler=']Dude. I think we'd all appreciate it if you'd START TAKING THE ADVICE!The smileys are ANOYING and POINTLESS. CHECK YOUR GRAMMAR!!! ... whew, sorry. I just have to let it out every once in a little while. Anyway, pleaae do as above.-have a nice day. Fine, I'll Stop The Smileys (Btw I Do Grammar Check)And As For Advice For Battles The Only Reason Last Battle Was Short Was Because I Didn't Have Much Time To Write.As For The Bold It Seems Every Time You Say About Grammar Check You Seem To Have Grammar Mistakes :lol: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezio Posted March 20, 2009 Report Share Posted March 20, 2009 [align=center]lol :lol: :lol:I like smileys ;)But not in the FanFic Cove![/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lelouch Lamperouge Posted March 20, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 20, 2009 Kl Kl :)Consider The Smileys Gone In Further Chapters Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezio Posted March 20, 2009 Report Share Posted March 20, 2009 [align=center]Cool ;)When do you think Chapter 6 will be up?[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lelouch Lamperouge Posted March 20, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 20, 2009 Dunno.Prob 2Morrow :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezio Posted March 20, 2009 Report Share Posted March 20, 2009 [align=center]Cool!And there will be no smileys this time right? :? :lol: ;)[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fallen Hero Posted March 20, 2009 Report Share Posted March 20, 2009 and no making the battles be easy for cubone or any other pokemon, right? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lelouch Lamperouge Posted March 21, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 21, 2009 Dnt Worry, It'll Be My Best Chapter So Far :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezio Posted March 24, 2009 Report Share Posted March 24, 2009 [align=center]Oooooooh.....Sounds good.... I hate you on so many levels...[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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