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Altered Beast Fan Fic (Chapter 5 is up): Now adding theme songs.


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You missed my critiquing.

 

If you're really 18 like your profile says' date=' you should be able to write even a decent fanfic. You rarely capitalize "I", and you often forget to use periods when necessary. I'm sorry, I know you wrote more, but I just had to stop during Chapter 1 to say this. I took a quick peak at your other chapters, and I didn't see much improvement.

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that's not meant to be spamming, just for some reason it won't show the last post if it started a new page so i typed the above to see what it was before anyone complains.


You missed my critiquing.

 

If you're really 18 like your profile says' date=' you should be able to write even a decent fanfic. You rarely capitalize "I", and you often forget to use periods when necessary. I'm sorry, I know you wrote more, but I just had to stop during Chapter 1 to say this. I took a quick peak at your other chapters, and I didn't see much improvement.

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To be honest you sound as if your trying to undermine what i have done so far and it won't work. i already know i'm not good at literacy and the whole capitalizing "I" thing, i'll do it when i have the patience too.

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as with many sci-fi films when you try to harness the power of a gene, the military tends to lose control of ti.

 

For example, you can create a superpowerful beast with this gene in thinking it would do your bidding, but you can't control it.

 

Not that I feel that's what will happen with your fic, but you know what I'm getting at.

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that's not meant to be spamming' date=' just for some reason it won't show the last post if it started a new page so i typed the above to see what it was before anyone complains.[hr']

You missed my critiquing.

 

If you're really 18 like your profile says' date=' you should be able to write even a decent fanfic. You rarely capitalize "I", and you often forget to use periods when necessary. I'm sorry, I know you wrote more, but I just had to stop during Chapter 1 to say this. I took a quick peak at your other chapters, and I didn't see much improvement.

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To be honest you sound as if your trying to undermine what i have done so far and it won't work. i already know i'm not good at literacy and the whole capitalizing "I" thing, i'll do it when i have the patience too.

 

If you're going to use "undermine", then fine. I'm just critiquing you for not having an understanding of basic literacy just because you're impatient.

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Sorry i haven't be online any earlier been busy.

1. omega David is accepted but i need to think how the revival ability would be possible though' date=' if you can enlighten me on how it is done would be helpful.

 

2. What have i missed?

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If I'm right...Doesn't a Pheonix's Tears usually help revive the Wound?

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Sorry i haven't be online any earlier been busy.

1. omega David is accepted but i need to think how the revival ability would be possible though' date=' if you can enlighten me on how it is done would be helpful.

 

2. What have i missed?

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If I'm right...Doesn't a Pheonix's Tears usually help revive the Wound?

 

If I recall correctly, isn't that from FF?

 

Therefor, it doesn't count.

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