Deity Marvel Posted March 17, 2009 Report Share Posted March 17, 2009 I don't want this thread to die, so bump! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fenrir Posted March 17, 2009 Report Share Posted March 17, 2009 Dam; yea, writer's block killed me off. Sorriez ;( Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snitch Posted March 17, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 17, 2009 It's not dead, I was giving it a few days to see if we could get a few more entries, but, whatever. Reading now~Sorry for the dp, but round is now finished~ The winner is Ringo, I found his outstanding, with little to no punctuation errors and it made me want to keep reading. Soul Legacy, yours had a lot of errors with punctuation, capitals, full stops instead of commas (as in you need more full stops,) and things like that. Deity, yours seemed too non-fiction to me, and I really found it slightly boring. A good amount of description is great! - every single little detail is not. =/ BrokenHeart, I seriously couldn't read past the first paragraph. Your punctuation isn't great, and I wasn't dragged in - the point of a first paragraph is to draw the reader in, yours didn't do this. Shiko, yours was alright, although a bit more length would have been nice, and maybe a bit more to the story. Ignis, I liked yours, but I found it slightly confusing. Maybe lay down on that a bit? Anyway, as a special prize, I would like to welcome Ringo to the judging team. I realise I cannot do this alone by far, and Ringo fits the part. However, you are still allowed to compete Ringo, and, because you've joined, so can I. >D On another note, a new 'points system' has now been added. With help from Deity, I have managed to figure out a system which works, with certain things as 'you can exchange -- points to have your name gold on the scoreboard' etc. ^-^ Another thing of the future will be tournaments - 1v1 write-offs to see who's the best in CaW! at the moment. To finish it all off, Calling all Writers! is now abbreviated to CaW!. So, if you put it in your sig or anything, link it as 'CaW!' for more space. Also, I'd like to thank you all who joined - I thought this would fail terribly, but you guys have shown me otherwise. ^-^ Anyway, Round Two! [align=center]Round TwoWe've done prose, time for poetry. Write a poem about Spring - it's nearly here remember! If you're not a poetry writer, give it a go! Maybe you'll learn a thing or two.[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Deity Marvel Posted March 17, 2009 Report Share Posted March 17, 2009 Hm... never wrote a poem before in my life, but why not write one now? ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RingoEx19 Posted March 17, 2009 Report Share Posted March 17, 2009 Thanks for the compliments on my piece! I found the others to be just as interesting to read as well =] I'll be most welcome to join as a judge for this thread. I don't suspect that the workload will be too hard nor too profuse. I'll also be the first person to start this round off. The countryside is a magical place; Where Nature is unobstructed, unhampered, and entirely pure in its Wholeness of harmony; It is a place where I can lift my eyes every night and grasp the ghostly image ofThe midnight sky, a black scrap of fabric stretched tautly and interminably across the worldDotted and sprinkled with thousands of winking stars; gleaming points of pouring radiance; and as I swivel my head The intermingled scents of sweet pine trees are all caught in a single whiffAnd whence in the wide fields of grain? did a melody strike into my eardrums— of hordes of crickets eagerly humming and chirping everywhere beneath stalks of wheatof nightingales ringing out lovely songs of grace and captivation from their tawny beaks— all churning and melding into one great organic symphony; As I felt Nature’s thrumming in my blood and its mighty presence all over me,I strode through tuffets of tall grass towards the base of a formidable redwood That stood out as Nature’s dazzling scepter, a proud and triumphant shaft of wooden antiquityWith millions of beetles and ants and termites sheltered inside of its safe barkMillions of lives thriving through the sole existence of this single TreeAnd there, I collapsed, beaten and worn down by the majesties that surrounded me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Deity Marvel Posted March 17, 2009 Report Share Posted March 17, 2009 Here, is mine. It's not that good, but as I said before, I never wrote a poem in my life. [spoiler= Poem]Today is the day when bold kites fly,When cumulus clouds roar across the sky.When robins return, when children cheer,When light rain beckons spring to appear. Today is the day when daffodils bloom,Which children pick to fill the room,Today is the day when grasses green,When leaves burst forth for spring to be seen. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted March 17, 2009 Report Share Posted March 17, 2009 [spoiler=spring, time]whistling skylark troubadours march across paths of cotton clouds forkeeping timekeeping time to tell the sleeping and drowsy tulips to yawn, and stretch their fingers, and towave in timewave in time they tap the dowager willow’s shoulder whilst asking her very demurely, “is itrising time?”rising time?” sighing and extending her bare, lonely branches to the sky, she says to them,“it is time.”“it is time.” Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shiko11 Posted March 18, 2009 Report Share Posted March 18, 2009 I had an assignment in class for this! LMAO! here goes my spring couplet: [spoiler=Spring Emotions]Blossoms engulf me in springtime cheer.Why have may friends wanted this all year? I never understood the reason for this;The fuss over yet another season's bliss. What a waste of timeThat could not be defined. I have failed to embraceThe traditional haste As Spring grows nearSo does my fear Of having to smileFor just a short while. I hate Spring. The end ^^. I got a C- in english for this. :l Btw, Ringo. I like your poetry. ^^ I wish I was as good as you. I never really liked all this rhimey sh**. I always enjoyed descriptive writing tho. ^^ see you in the winners circle. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zimiri of the Muse Posted March 19, 2009 Report Share Posted March 19, 2009 im in[spoiler=poem] in the spring time sunshine rulesand happiness is not all that fuels a single flower stands alonemade not of solid bone when the sunshine hits that flowerhundreds spring up so no one can be sour in the noon you can dance in you fancy shroudsor relax and watch the cloudsthe end Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shiko11 Posted March 19, 2009 Report Share Posted March 19, 2009 oh wow yet another couplet? ^^ I find it fitting for a spring poem.EDIT: uhm. I guess I'll make a second. I mean, why not? You don't have to judge this; It isn't going to have anything to do with Spring.(I hate spring) [spoiler=Here we go :/]I Embrace my feelings for you.How are you amused?This is so confusing and I can't understand We stand togetherIntersectedBut sometimes parrallel? I reach my arms out to catch youBut you push me away.Why do I bother?Why do you reject me? So I let my blood boilAs hatred rages onAnd I can't help the feeling that... I am who I am You try to change meTo corrupt my lifeWhy do you hate me? I won't let you effect who I am!I'll just push you asideLook into your eyes and say: I don't need you by my sideI don't want to listen to your liesYou way of tearing my heart apartWill stop! But I don't mean a single wordBecause that's not who I amAnd you can't change that!You cna't change that... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RingoEx19 Posted March 19, 2009 Report Share Posted March 19, 2009 No worries, I'll give you a healthy dose of feedback on your second poem even if it's not being judged during my free time in a private message or on the 25th. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shiko11 Posted March 20, 2009 Report Share Posted March 20, 2009 oh wow. a healthy dose? :D yay. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Soul Legacy Posted March 21, 2009 Report Share Posted March 21, 2009 MY POEM: Oh yes its spring again, flowers blossom, tree's leaves growing, pollen rising. So hayfever suffers, prepare for the battle. When i walk down the street, i see children playing, and dogs playing with them, which makes me smile, all the way to my destination, wherever that may be. Sorry, but i haven't got any insperation, so i posted this very short poem instead Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luna Diviner Posted March 21, 2009 Report Share Posted March 21, 2009 I am not a judge but I'll like to point out that you should use a high case I. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RingoEx19 Posted March 21, 2009 Report Share Posted March 21, 2009 I am not a judge but I'll like to point out that you should use a high case I. This does not apply to be true. Many professional poets of past and present do not use capitals in their poems. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luna Diviner Posted March 21, 2009 Report Share Posted March 21, 2009 Well I am kind off a grammar nazi, so carry on. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted March 22, 2009 Report Share Posted March 22, 2009 Is it too late for me to join? If you are willing to accept me, I can only begin on round 3 at least. But it's your call on what I should do. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shiko11 Posted March 22, 2009 Report Share Posted March 22, 2009 I say join. This is not really a competition, it is made to help you become a better poet/author. :) So, feel free to join in ( do not take my word, I am not a judge) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snitch Posted March 22, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 22, 2009 Is it too late for me to join? If you are willing to accept me' date=' I can only begin on round 3 at least. But it's your call on what I should do.[/quote'] Mmm, sure. ^-^ Nice entires so far guys, keep 'em coming. 25th is deadline - Wednesday. Good luck. ^-^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shiko11 Posted March 22, 2009 Report Share Posted March 22, 2009 wednesday? It's not my desicion but, I would have the deadline like, tomorrow. I think that would be enough time. Again, not my call. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snitch Posted March 22, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 22, 2009 wednesday? It's not my desicion but' date=' I would have the deadline like, tomorrow. I think that would be enough time. Again, not my call.[/quote'] WEDNESDAY. >_> I have spoken! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shiko11 Posted March 22, 2009 Report Share Posted March 22, 2009 yes u has. no need to have another mental breakdown. :l lol. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted March 22, 2009 Report Share Posted March 22, 2009 Is it too late for me to join? If you are willing to accept me' date=' I can only begin on round 3 at least. But it's your call on what I should do.[/quote'] Mmm, sure. ^-^ Nice entires so far guys, keep 'em coming. 25th is deadline - Wednesday. Good luck. ^-^Alright, I will look out for your Round 3 then. Until Wednesday then! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shiko11 Posted March 23, 2009 Report Share Posted March 23, 2009 C'mon wednesday. D:< get you butt over here so we can continue. >.> wednesday is always my bad day. That's why we call it "hump day." For those of you who have not heard of it, I really don't want to hear you saying it's a sexual joke. CUZ IT'S NOT! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
六兆年と一夜物語 Posted March 23, 2009 Report Share Posted March 23, 2009 Intresting. I am willing to join. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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