.:Abarai Renji:. Posted March 5, 2009 Report Share Posted March 5, 2009 Well, I like the show more. If you picked some more aspects from the show, I be happy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fenrir Posted March 5, 2009 Report Share Posted March 5, 2009 Meh, as long as it contains violence, good chars, and plot development. I'm happy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Southparkerstan Posted March 5, 2009 Report Share Posted March 5, 2009 This is a sweet fanfic! Mine is similar to yours in the aspect that it has the elements of aregular pokemon journey with a big twist. I like the way your being secretive, so far I would have only rated this PG-13 for Fuji's rival's language (forgot his name). I also think the frendship was a bit rushed, but they had already met. Other than that, I really like it. I'm excited about chapter 3! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
☨βlack☨ Posted March 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 6, 2009 Thanks for showing support everyone. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted March 6, 2009 Report Share Posted March 6, 2009 No prob. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aelsthla-Mental Posted March 6, 2009 Report Share Posted March 6, 2009 Oops, forgot to subscribe to the thread! Well, Chapter two is nice. Perhaps a little too friendly with a random stranger met in the woods... But perhaps that is just his character. Wonder if he'll learn the hard way about that, or will all villains knock on the door with an iron fist? Perhaps too sudden, but room to use it to your advantage. Good job! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fenrir Posted March 6, 2009 Report Share Posted March 6, 2009 IRON FIST =D No prob on the support. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
☨βlack☨ Posted March 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 6, 2009 Oh no. I was just giving him one friendly friend. He makes another the hard way. I am finishing chapter 3 right now. Right after I'll do chapter 4 to make up for me not writing them for a while Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fenrir Posted March 7, 2009 Report Share Posted March 7, 2009 Relax, post chapter 3 when your done, then continue with chapter 4. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hand of God Posted March 7, 2009 Report Share Posted March 7, 2009 Nice stuff, but I didn't find anyone violence, gore, horror, sex refers, coarse language. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
☨βlack☨ Posted March 7, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 7, 2009 The warning won't be until later chapters. Don't worry, your needs will be filled. Maybe soon. ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
☨βlack☨ Posted March 7, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 7, 2009 Double Post! Chapter 3 has been released! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted March 7, 2009 Report Share Posted March 7, 2009 Chapter 3 is sweet! A Smeargle is JUST what Stephanie needs! Pity I didn´t think of it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hand of God Posted March 7, 2009 Report Share Posted March 7, 2009 I can't find Chapter 3 :( Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted March 7, 2009 Report Share Posted March 7, 2009 Just scroll down a bit and you´ll find it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
☨βlack☨ Posted March 7, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 7, 2009 Chapter four is gonna be a funny one. I can't make a POKEMON FanFic too serious lol Edit: Chapter 3 is right under Chapter 2. >.> Second post Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aelsthla-Mental Posted March 7, 2009 Report Share Posted March 7, 2009 Aahh, there is the swearing... The manin character lost? YAY! Not perfect then... I think. Well, neat chapter. Good luck! I'll end with one line. ...A smeargle with dragon pulse :O. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fenrir Posted March 7, 2009 Report Share Posted March 7, 2009 O_O I like chapter 3 Guy in cloak is a bit idk. Like, familiar. <_< Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Queen-Dragoon Posted March 8, 2009 Report Share Posted March 8, 2009 Good idea with the Smeargle. Overall, a consistently high standard. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
☨βlack☨ Posted March 8, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 8, 2009 The cloaked man is original in Pokemon. It's actually an idea I got from "OBLIVION". Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fenrir Posted March 16, 2009 Report Share Posted March 16, 2009 BUMPAGE Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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